This story sounds interesting, keep it coming. Happy Valentine's Day! 

I read your story and this is my review as you have requested. The plot is fine and it's an interesting read, however, I think you should shorten the paragraphs so that your fic is easier to read. Next seperate unrelated thoughts in different paragraphs, that will help with the flow of the story. Also you could advertise for a Beta through the forums, someone is always willing to help. I wish you all the best.