Awesome!!!! I'm looking forward to reading more.
Hi!
I like your story so far, it's an interesting concept. However, there were a few times that I encountered the wrong tense of a word, such as 'fught' when it should have been 'fought' to keep in with the past tense of the dtory. So I would have a beta check over your story first to fix any mistakes you may have missed.
Good luck!
ryoko (Chapter 3) - Wed 17 Feb 2016
u have a good story going
update soon please
Mona (Chapter 3) - Wed 17 Feb 2016
Great!!! Looking forward to reading more.
Tarajah (Chapter 3) - Wed 17 Feb 2016
Really interested to see where this story goes
Please keep up with regular updates. I am loving where this story is going. Awesome idea!!!
Lady T (Chapter 1) - Wed 17 Feb 2016
Like the story idea excited to get the next chapter, so update soon.
ryoko (Chapter 2) - Wed 17 Feb 2016
interesting, has promise
how old is kagome now?
if you her remmember when she is 8 or 9 in chap 1
in chap 2, you have act like she is younger then 8 or 9
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