Love love love this story! It’s completely different from your others (yes I have read all of them and I love them all dearly). I love how you changed things around. Hanyou are actually very smart animals that are still looked down upon in society in some ways just like Youkai have the same frame of mind when it comes to humans. And you make it work very well.
I look forward to finding out more of Kagomes history and why she is the way she is and to watch the love bloom in between sesshomaru and kagome
I think Kagome's inteo was fun. I used to work in a kennel and aggressive dogs typically just need time and patience to build trust. Very neat way to intro InuYasha too. I feel like, though very different, it is a truer way to display his character. He isn't full demon and the idea that the functionality of changing to a humanoid form is reserved for a being with a higher power ties in with his inability to maintain control of his yokai in the actual series. His being a dog allows a very different way to display characteristics and emotions, reactions that are truer of his personality than as a humanoid. And the fact that he can communicate, even if only to other inu gives it a nice twist and challenge. Leave it to Sesshoumaru to simplify ????
Your story has an interesting concept; doesn't Sesshomaru recognize Inuyasha as his half brother?
I like your story: please update soon.
Hello,
I'm happy to see that you are working on a new story. After reading and enjoying "Dream Child", "Prison Love" and "Second Chance Child" I can't wait to read this one too. You are an amazing writer!
The first few paragraphs that are kind of the epilog of this story were interesting. I liked that you described the different steps and events that mark the developement between the human and the youkai race.
I also liked how you worked in a few canon elements, especially the part with Rin! It's kind of sweet how jealous he was until he decided to take her for his own and how he is still trying to act in a way she would aprove of.
The idea this whole story is based on seems promising! So I have no doubt that your new story will be worth reading!
But while the idea is absolute great your writing skills seem a bit rusty. And I'm not talking about the numerous grammar mistakes you did, but more of the style. Especially the first half of the chapter was kind of "tiring" to read. (Try f.e. to be more variable in the structure of the sentences.) I know that you can do better! And I'm sure that the more you work on your chapters the easier it will be to get into the flow again.
I'm looking forward to your next update!
