Please get a beta for this story. It i promising but the grammatical mistakes are unbearable.
I would implore that you learn the finer nuances of emotions. And spacing. I found the story erratic, and I gave it many chances, but I find I truly cannot bring myself to finish it. The characters' reactions were borderline inexplicable and the way the plot progressed downright preposterous.
I do not intend to be mean, but failure to learn would truly be detrimental to your future writing.
This story was great and I enjoyed it!
Alicia (Chapter 21) - Sat 21 Jul 2012
This was a really good story and I couldn't stop reading it :)
However the mentioning of greek gods throughout the story kind of annoyed me, oh well, I loved it anyway.
Such a great story, Jen. I love how you give such wonderful twists and turns and don't over-do it in the angst dept, keeping everything balanced out.
I really like your story. Now to what I have to say about it, I really hate it to. It was good, really it was. There was a little to much angst. Really, though. It was an amazing story and I will probably read it again. It needs some grammar checking though. Most of them are little things like repeats or you just misspelled or used the wrong word. Still great job.
missy (Chapter 1) - Wed 22 Dec 2010
this is a very good, wonderful, great story, and i love and like this story since i first started reading it your a very good, wonderful great author who wrote this wonderful, good, great story.
Rocks (Chapter 21) - Wed 28 Jul 2010
This is like the coolest and weirdest story ever. I kept wondering how you were going to get the story to come around to that of what the original anime was. The only flaw I saw was the word trashed like a trash can is should be thrashed the 'h' was missing out of every single one of them. Other wise I loved the story it was so different and kept you guessing what would happen to the characters. I bet you could have taken this further with the sister momo and on into the future but is was still a good ending. Thanks for the great read
Muy Bueno! lo que es una hermosa historia. Un escritor de talento que está (Mi Spanish es terrible).
Very good! What a beautiful story. A gifted writer you are. (my spanish is terrilbe)
Hesunohana (Chapter 9) - Sat 27 Mar 2010
I'm only on the 9th chapter of your fiction, but still, I wanted to leave a review.
well, strange is my first comment. the atmosphere, how you write, strange. but there is also ggood cliffhanger. we all know Midoriko is gonna die, but what will become of Kagome ? and Sesshoumaru ?
so I'm gonna continue reading because I like your fiction ! (smile)
I looove it! Can't wait until I can finish reading it
Athenesic (Chapter 2) - Tue 23 Mar 2010
I love it! Great story. :)
Lexie (Chapter 21) - Wed 10 Mar 2010
naaaw :) but sad. please update!!
Darcy (Chapter 21) - Tue 09 Mar 2010
That was a very good chapter..loved the ending!
Lexie (Chapter 20) - Fri 22 Jan 2010
wow.
PLEASE UPDATE!!
Megan (Chapter 1) - Mon 18 Jan 2010
I LOVE IT!!!
there are, however, a few mistakes in subject-verb agreement but there are so few of them for a secondary language!!! I'm really impressed!! *smiles brightly and happily*
Keep writing, I wanna see where this goes!!
Bye!! =}}
Lexie (Chapter 19) - Mon 18 Jan 2010
ok wierd, odd but so damn addicting.
PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
mary (Chapter 18) - Fri 15 Jan 2010
i'm sorry, all the twists are confusing and frustrating me to no end. i mean i know the title is "when the past is the future," but i keep wondering if that is the case, wouldn't it result in a repeat of events? what'll happen now? or won't it? like a new reality of some sort? i dunno. i guess we'll see.
Lexie (Chapter 17) - Tue 12 Jan 2010
awww, poor Kagome! when will she awake? will she and sesshoumaru make up?
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