This made me laugh. =D
I think my favourite part was the peanutbutter, but only because it's my favourite thing to put on bread. Or anything bread-related. Sometimes I eat my peanutbutter straight from the jar with a fork. It amuses me. Anyways, I really liked this. It was sweet. Good job, I can't wait to read more.
LC Rose (Chapter 2) - Thu 11 Dec 2008
We are always our own worst critic (this I know from experience) and there is always room for improvement--even by the vets of writing (I'm not one of those). I found this two piece of be wonderfully done. It flowed well and the interaction was simply said but easily pictured. For me, I find enjoyment in something that brings a smile to my face and I can picture happening in my mind. People chewing gum loudly I can see bothering our inuyoukai with his sensitive hearing and is totally plausible. The interaction between he and Rin was so cute, too. And I liked the fact that Inuyasha spit his gum in Seshsoumaru's (ouch!) hair. Last line of defense and all.
oh that was too funny! lol. i can so see Inuyasha doing that, though!
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