I have to tell you that although you have a wonderful storyline and plot here,  the English and grammar are so poor, it pretty much ruins the entire fic.  Half of the time, I had no idea what anyone said (i.e. chapter 11, Kaede and Miroku speaking to one another..

"Calm down, Miroku." She calmly voiced. "All that you said I well note, but there is any different thing that must be done now. Kikyo is allied with Naraku and now that he has mated her, he is subject to it. I know that you and all others are not pleased with him and his actions, but this is not he that you see act out.

This did not make any sense!!  Especially "All that you said I well note, but there is any different thing that  must be done now.???   And, you said, "Attended", referring to Kagome.  It is "Intended"!!

These are just two mistakes out of way too many to count or mention.  I suggest that before you continue with the next chapter, that you take a class in English with emphasis on proper grammar and punctuation.

EVIL YOU STOP AT THE WORST TIMES!!! *CRY SNIFF SNIFF CRY* WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO US?!

ANYWAY UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOON

great job I love it and I think that whats holding Sesshomaru back is his pride and honor

Hi! I really like this story. You get us into the intrigue of the plot line right away. I noticed a minor grammar error, and didn't think much of it, but the same error was in the next chapter- So I thought I would pass on the rule. "Do" is an irregular verb- it changes differently depending on the subject.  I do, You do, s/he does, they do, it does; It's the same with the negatives- I don't, you don't, s/he doesn't, they don't, it doesn't.

In this chapter, this takes place when Kagome is talking to Kaede "...he forgot and don't want me no more." In chapter 2, the glitch is probably a computer correction, "Ma...doesn't."

You've got a good story going. Have you considered getting a beta to help out with grammar and such?

Thank you for sharing,

Kyuthe

I love it!

please, update as soon as you can!!

Aww... I hope my comment wasn't too harsh... I'm sorry if it was.
I really like your story. This chapter made me laugh. I'm looking forward to the next one.

I loved that chp great job keep up the good work update soon

I love it!!! Wow... I am really into this story. Good work!!

Oh PLZ PLZ PLZ update soooooooon!!! *__*

Hey I was wondering if english was your first language or not. You have several places were  you used a word that sounds like the word it should be but isn't the correct one to use in that situation. The story line is solid though, so you get points for that. If you can find some one to Beta your chapters for you, it helps a lot just to have some one else go over your work before posting.