So... there's this bit towards the end of your story that says "Sesshoumaru sheathed his sword" or something like that, only, before that, no mention of Sesshoumaru unsheathing either Tokijin or Tenseiga is made. That leaves one to wonder, which sword did Sesshoumaru sheath...? ^.^
Oh, and I'm not asking you to fix that, in fact I say leave it for the giggles. XP
| I just started reading your story and I love it!very well written and excelet plot..I can't wait to read more!=^.^=
Brights (Chapter 1) - Sat 14 Mar 2009
| WOW! That was really good! Please you have to continue this and make it a story! It looks like it will have a great plot! It would be awesome to see Sesshy trying to pursue Kags, but she will play hard to get! ^.^ Please update soon! I will be waiting anxiously!
I loved it! You should really continue it ^-^ ...i dont want to be mean or hurt your feelings (this is a great fic) but you should look into getting a beta. please dont stop where its at T.T you'll have to live with a guilty conscience that i will cry myself to sleep at night...XOXO get to work =P
I loved it! You should really continue it ^-^ ...i dont want to be mean or hurt your feelings (this is a great fic) but you should look into getting a beta. please dont stop where its at T.T you'll have to live with a guilty conscience that i will cry myself to sleep at night...XOXO get to work =P
Tiff (Chapter 1) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
| Oh, do please make this a chapter fic! It's nice to know that there'll be more wrll written pieces to read latter. And I really do like this.
Tiff (Chapter 1) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
| Oh, do please make this a chapter fic! It's nice to know that there'll be more wrll written pieces to read latter. And I really do like this.
Oh, my... I certainly hope you decide to write more. I loved it!
ginger (Chapter 1) - Thu 26 Feb 2009
| by all means please do continue the story. already i am a fan of ur work so please please please continue
guest (Chapter 1) - Thu 26 Feb 2009
| loved it!! please continue it. ^^
Sesshys_Honey (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Feb 2009
| YES, you should continue. How can anyone get one taste of Sesshy and not want more. This is a great one-shot but it would make a wonderful story.
sunset in love (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Feb 2009
hey, don't doubt yourself, you are great at it as it is... now, don't stop at chap 1, and please don't make it oneshot, i believe you already planned out the plot, right? so don't let it go to waste then, it is better be posted here for us to appreciate (selfish much, am i?), but really, this is great, i personally would really like to see just how sessh are going to pursue kag since he had declare that human are... what... insignificant? let see who is the insignificant one now, besides, you could make kag a lot more harder to get for sessh, see how will he enjoy that and eating his own words... huh, i'm getting mean, yay!!!!
Sala (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Feb 2009
A decent piece, to be certain. But you should get a beta to edit your work for grammar and spelling errors.
Two Hearts (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Feb 2009
| I LOVED IT!!!! I beg you please continue with this story. My heart is still pounding. Thanks for the good read.
Anonymous (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Feb 2009
WOW great chappy keep up the great work and update
Elenna (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Feb 2009
| Wow! So I'm the first to review this.
Other than a few grammer errors that I spotted along the way, I found that I really enjoyed this piece. Escpecially how you kept both Sesshomaru and Kagome in charatcer.
I'm very curious to see if you'll go beyond just this one-shot. I think it has a lot of potential to go for some more chapters (but not too many). Maybe you should think about going along the lines of contious one-shots like LC Rose's "collared" story.
Anyway, it's a great one-shot and I think you may want to check back through it for some grammer errors...but overall, I think you did a fantastic job!
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