Ummmmm interesting 

this was great. keep up the good workand writing

THANK YOU, I CAN'T BELIEVE SHE GOT CAUGHT PLEASURING HERSELF! AND I DIDN'T KNOW IT WASN'T ALLOWED!

The first chapter was really good.  Usually I would say the sex between them started too fast without enough of a background relationship between them but the way you wrote it is believable.  I even buy into Sesshoumaru mating her since you explain that he has been attracted to her for some time.  The sex between them was both earthy and sensual.  

However, once I get to chapter 2 that's where the story begins to loose some of it's credibility for me.  Mostly it's because the chapter is rushed. So much information is given so fast without a lot of development.  For instance when Sesshoumaru explains that Shippou won't want anything to do with Kagome after mating him.  You do give a reason why but it seems out of character in that Shippou's relationship with Kagome has been more of a mother/child one than a romantic one.  Since you also have Sango as something of a demon expert in this story which follows the manga/anime then wouldn't she have known about Shippou's true motives and feelings for Kagome and warned her.  Another thing that bothered me is at the end of the chapter Kagome asking Sango if she could accept her decision to be Sesshoumaru's mate.  But I got the impression from the first chapter that although she willing had sex with him, Kagome never intended at least not at that point to be his mate.  I thought he sort of mated her without asking.  

Overall I think this is a really good story.  The first chapter is great and to me could have, if you had so chose, to stand alone as a one shot. As for telling the continuation of the story with Kagome learning about what it means to be an inu demon's mate as well as the fall out with her friends I think if you just explain more maybe expand the story for a couple of more chapters and it would be an awesome story.

This has the basis of a good story, but I'm afraid it needs quite a bit of work before it will truly shine. First off everything seems quite rushed. The lemon was over in the blink of an eye it seemed, and most everyone seemed very OOC. Luckily all of these are relativley easy fixes. All you really have to do is go in and flesh everything out with some more details. There were also a couple of spelling and grammar issues but nothing a quick edit won't fix. I wish you luck with this, and will look foreward to more of your work in the future.

First off I would like to say that this fic has the foundation to be something great. I found the 1st chapter to be unrealistic. It seemed rushed. I would go back and reread it and add details. Also it seemed to jump. You have Kagome's powers being spread out but she doesn't notice someone like Sesshoumaru? It made no sense to me. There were a few grammatical errors as well. Then you have him using his whole fist to please her, this, to me, seemed extreamly unrealistic. She was a virgin in your fic so I don't see how that is possible. You also start this as a rape and yet she screams his name? Kagome is OOC majorly.

In the 2nd chapter, I also feel as if you have a good foundation, but were in a rush. It has great basics, but I think that is about it. It jumps from one scene to another without any explaination. The characters are in arguments before I could even tell what their emotions were. Kagome, in my opinion, was WAY too excepting of everything. You have her being raped and yet she is gonna go along with it with no problem? I had a big issue with this.

~Teana

First off I would like to say that this fic has the foundation to be something great. I found the 1st chapter to be unrealistic. It seemed rushed. I would go back and reread it and add details. Also it seemed to jump. You have Kagome's powers being spread out but she doesn't notice someone like Sesshoumaru? It made no sense to me. There were a few grammatical errors as well. Then you have him using his whole fist to please her, this, to me, seemed extreamly unrealistic. She was a virgin in your fic so I don't see how that is possible. You also start this as a rape and yet she screams his name? Kagome is OOC majorly.

In the 2nd chapter, I also feel as if you have a good foundation, but were in a rush. It has great basics, but I think that is about it. It jumps from one scene to another without any explaination. The characters are in arguments before I could even tell what their emotions were. Kagome, in my opinion, was WAY too excepting of everything. You have her being raped and yet she is gonna go along with it with no problem? I had a big issue with this.

~Teana

Well interesting idea but I noticed a few problems.  I felt it was a bit too OOC, rather rushed and the lemon itself could use a bit of a rework.  In one sentence you mention she plays with a breast and in the very next she had completely satisfied both.  Right after he starts playing with her, she finishes five times.  Not exactly realistic in my opinion.  But with a bit of work, you could have a really nice lemon here.

Well...that was interesting...I think it is a little strange that Kagome was so wrapped up in masterbating that she didn't notice Sesshoumaru sneaking his hands in and joining in the fun. Kagome also bent her will to his a little to quickly. She is a strong woman, and I don't believe that she would just do whatever he wants, she would do what she thinks is right...not what is expected of her, after all, she is a product of the twenty first century! I also think that Shippou wouldn't just tell her that he never wants to speak to her ever again, even if kitsune and inu don't get along. I would definately consider getting a beta for this story and reworking some of it. It is your story and you can write it however you want. I am just giving my opinion, you can take it however you want. Anyways, keep on writing, everyone sees this pairing in their own way!

Lemon yes, simple no. The whole mating seemed a little forced and you never did explain why Sesshoumaru desired Kagome of all people. The interactions with InuYasha and Shippou were a little unexpected; although Miroku remained himself. And Kagome acting so docile was completely OOC. There were some spelling errors and quite a few missing punctuation. This story needs more information, more details and definitely deserves to have all the unknowns known. It would be a whole lot more dramatic and smexy.