Now he just has to tell KAGOME that he wants her. Before she does something foolish like letting him go for 'his sake' in her not-knowing.
Well it's a really good story plot-wise, but you have odd errors all over the place, like you seem to have in & on confused, every time you use on it should be in & the few times you've used in it should be on. Also in this chapter phantom should be fathom. You seem to have tense problems too, like putting ing on things that should have ed instead, somewhere in this you have attacking you & it should be attacked you, stuff like that.
Loveyaa (Chapter 34) - Thu 29 Dec 2011
Wow...a lot has happened. I like the connection that seems to have flourished and solidified between Kagome, Sesshoumaru, and Meta. I think it is interesting that a new beast is born inside a demon when the old one is passed on and they have different personalities. I wonder how Sesshoumaru's new revelation will effect the battle they are about to enter (I wonder if he will as hurt as he is). I also hope that the group somehow ends up back together or at least meeting back up. I can't wait to see what happens and if this will be the end of naraku :)
REDWOLF (Chapter 34) - Tue 27 Dec 2011
WOW....WOW!!!!
Selazul (Chapter 34) - Tue 27 Dec 2011
It was perfect :)
Lillian (Chapter 34) - Tue 27 Dec 2011
EEE Meta's manifested! Egads! What will happen next? Will Meta return to Sesshomaru? Oooh the suspense!
O.o.o.o.o WHY did Yuza try to kill Sess? Why why WHY? @_@ Don't tell me i's because she wants the West for herself? @_@ Gahhh. >.<
*wails in love and joy and omg i have to wait for more*flails wildly* MORE!!!
yume (Chapter 34) - Mon 26 Dec 2011
OH MY GOD!! i loved the chapter >.< <3 the way sesshoumaru felt enamored >.<......... merry christmas
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