These were both excellent drabbles in my opinion, the only suggestion I have is to up the rating to MA because of the sexual nature of your drabbles. Other than that, well done!
Very good reads. I always admire those who are able to do those stories/drabbles with EXACTLY x number of words. I can imagine its not easy, so that leaves me even more impressed. Only tip is to maybe rethink the rating. I'd mark this as more MA than M, but that may just be me. You can always show it to a mod as I KNOW they would be more than happy to help you pick a proper rating, just to be safe. Happy Writing!
Hairann (Chapter 2) - Tue 05 Oct 2010
Very nicely done drabbles, though I think they might be better off rated MA instead of M. M means the reader has to be at least 16, MA means 18 and considering some of the words used I'd say more MA than M.
Very cute. I look forward to the next chapter. For some reason I can definitrly see Sesshomaru being a devient and he is just pompus enough to not be swayed with public nudity but would get a kick out of Kagome's shyness. I think you portrayed the two of them very nicely. Great job.
I really like your style of writing. Reading through your drabbles I picked up quickly on the fact that you related the story very well to the prompt that was given, especially for Public (really liked that one). I hope to see more from you...and I would also like to say that your first attempt at doing weekly perfection (Steam) was really...really good.
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