Very cute collection of drabbles though you may want to add in definitions of some of the words, espeically the last one. Also speaking of the last drabble, the layout seemed a bit off to me. You kept putting a sentence of dialog of one person on the same line as a sentence of details of the other. It made it a bit harder to follow, so you may want to watch for it in the future.
Ikaru (Chapter 11) - Fri 10 Dec 2010
These were very funny and, other than a few spelling and grammar errors, well written as well. The situations were unique and funny, I was laughing heartily as each new situation presented itself. I think my favorite ones were the 'Tricycle' and 'Vibrating.' Very well done. Keep up the good work!
These were really, really cute though I have to say that my favorites would be Fleas, Foil and Tricycle. Hope to see/read more from you so please keep up the good work! ^-^
I really liked these they were very cute. I think my favorite was with the tricycle and the toothbrush. I can just see Sesshomaru melting the evil tricycle that hurt Rin. I think it would make a funny fanart. As for the toothbrush that was hilarious. Him throwing it and his answer.lol. "It moved," classic. Can't wait for more.
Loved the different situations you put our favorite pair into, ZOMBIE FISHSTICKS FTW! xD there were a few spelling and grammar mistakes along the way, but well done overall :D
these were delightfully upbeat and outlandish! I dont think there are many attempts to write such silly nonsensical entertainment, because I think its sometimes harder to pull off. But you pull it off wonderfully. I was in stitches the entire time. I really loved these lighthearted drabbles. Just a few spelling and grammer corrections, and a little bit of formatting issues, but otherwise a perfectly delightful and enjoyable read! thank you!
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