It's a good fanfiction. I also like that you put it all in a one-shot. Why in God's green earth would you do 400 chapters for 30,000 words? This is not the official fanfiction site where the size print in automatic after it is previously set and the right arrow will go to the next page, not even mentioning the time just to have it load on the Internet (oops I did mention that..Oh well). You did repeat a whole section (at the very end when he picks her up and takes her to the study). I would like a companion piece. However, I must say that it didn't feel rushed at the end. With that ending, one would think so, but it seemed an appropriate place to end. So all in all, an excellent read.
It'd be great if you finished this story I love it!!!
Really good hope this continues.
Mona (Chapter 1) - Sat 11 Jun 2016
Great fanfic... I wonder if Kikyo was in on the plan and was slowly granting acces to the bees to infect Inuyasha.
Nothing here....
amy (Chapter 9) - Sat 29 Jan 2011
SO BEAUTIFUL, IT BROUGHT TEARS TO MY EYES!LET THEM WALLUP NARAKU INTO ETERNITY!
wickedone43 (Chapter 9) - Wed 19 Jan 2011
I am so glad you are back! I was about to cry!
This is one of my favorites. I love all your works but this one...it says something. I like the protrayal of all the characters.
It is simply AWESOME!!! Has a little bit of everything...storyline, plot, SEX, ahem...
Anyway, glad all is right with the world. Whew!
joyouki (Chapter 1) - Wed 19 Jan 2011
I love it! Sneaky hook up! Cant wait to read more
lara (Chapter 9) - Tue 18 Jan 2011
This was a nice story. Is it really over even without Naraku being defeated?? I believe it was listed as completed. I might be wrong I'll have to check. Anyway I'm glad that it was basically a happy story. I wonder why you chose not to go into Kikyo at all. I was trying to figure out if in this is story she was a good guy(meaning she just wanted to destroy Naraku,love Inuyasha & live long enough to do both before returning to death)or bad guy (still trying to ultimately take Inuyasha to hell before or after seeing Naraku dead & gone, or working with Naraku not really caring about who she hurts or anyone but herself) or just a neutral character(working on her own to defeat Naraku, spend time with Inuyasha & survive until her time is complete) but it's hard to see her as being a completely neutral undead character if she is having a sexual relationship with the person she loved when she was still living but never trusted even though upon her reanimation she learned of his innocence & that Naraku had used had used their worst fears & inner doubts against them by actually taking on their forms .............................meaning it wasn't Inuyasha who had attatcked her & hurt her but Naraku in Inuyashas form causing her to sh oo shot the real Inuyasha
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