Don't end it like THAT! At least explain how she became traumatised in more detail! But one thing, no happy ending please. This story just shouldn't have one. It'd be... wrong. Sess, senile and a superwoman?! Pfft.
Calypso (Chapter 5) - Tue 09 Aug 2011
You put Jaken in! :) Typical kind-hearted Kags, even though she's like a child now. Imagining Sess looking like Jaken was what got me laughing manically. I got stares I tell you.
Calypso (Chapter 4) - Tue 09 Aug 2011
Well at least you didn't do the scenario I was expecting. Trauma is a hard thing to write, but I think you pretty much pulled it off. Sess is being... well, Sess. His pain is most definitely feelable. If that is a word.
Calypso (Chapter 3) - Tue 09 Aug 2011
Kags isn't young after all. I think I'm starting to see why she's like a child. You'd better not have done what I think you have...
Calypso (Chapter 1) - Tue 09 Aug 2011
Young!Kags is adorkable! But that's not the point. The point is that you succeeded in making LGP seem imperfect in what he does. *hands you a 'WELL DONE!' cookie*
It was sweet in a way that hard to explain. Filled with remorse and a bitter dreams lost.
:( Naq, I have to agree with you on the ending. This is a heart-rending story and leaves me in tears. There's no hope for her, but he can't stop loving her and won't leave her, no matter what. There are some questions in life that have no answers and, thus, I think the way you've ended this story is appropriate. Very good work, Girl!
You make me cry....
I get the whole story being a sad and darkish one. But I still cried. Was hoping a miracle recovery I think... Christmas miracle.
But even then, I kinda liked it too. His emotions and all...
This is so sad, i've read all of it and really want to know what happened exactly. Is it brain damage or really traumatic experiences that made her that way. I like it though.
I am not certain as to what to say. This story is touching, but oh so hard for me to read. Every chapter, I find myself choking back tears at the plight he is facing. I would like to know more about how she came to be in that condition though. One thing that everyone should take away from this is - never take the people in your life for granted - they could be gone in the blink of an eye.
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