Please finish this story. It's very intriguing.
You have missed greatly. I realize that life can be crazy, mine is, but I do hope to see some future chapters. Sesshomaru is so sure of himself it would do him some good to have to work a little. Hope to hear from you soon. Merry Christmas.
Please update soon! I love this story!
Oh please update this story!
loneshinobi (Chapter 6) - Mon 19 Dec 2011
Great chapter, I am loving this story ! Kagome should definitly have two mates. I love Yue ! Update soon.
Please, let Kagome have only one mate. Maybe I'm old fashioned, but I'm not into multiple partners. So far I'm really enjoying the story.
Venita (Chapter 6) - Thu 15 Dec 2011
Love this chapter, please update soon.
Talk about the least effective way of gaining your future mates affections =P ah well I trust he will learn in the future update soon!!!!!
i love this story :) you write very well! I hope you update soon! I just gotta read more, the images in my head are quite comical.
Venita (Chapter 5) - Tue 06 Dec 2011
Great story, I can't wait for the next chapter, please update soon.
YES A NEW CHAPTER AFTER I DON"T KNOW HOW LONG, THANK YOU!!!!
pclark (Chapter 4) - Thu 21 Jul 2011
| Happy birthday. Thanks for the update. Look forward to seeing the next chapter.
Pandora (Chapter 4) - Wed 20 Jul 2011
Oh wow, honestly i didn't think i was going to like your story. However i was hooked from chapter 1!! :D I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work!! Ciao!!
Alexis (Chapter 3) - Tue 19 Jul 2011
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Congratulations on that promotion!
This was a pleasantly lengthy chappie! I bet Kagome's pretty confused, though! And Inuyasha! He's being such a jerk! Poor Kagome. But she'll eventually get over him, of course? Great chapter, update soon!
JA NE!
pclark (Chapter 2) - Fri 24 Jun 2011
omg please update this is good.
mandy (Chapter 2) - Thu 23 Jun 2011
HI :) ..well i think you have a great begining story line right now. This is something easy to fall into, but in any story ive read like this, you have to watch how powerful you make your characters. Right now i love the sesshomaru you've depicted, you have him in his true personality (its dead on lol). But know that we have Kagome entering the story, remember to keep her in character. :) ...Like in the series shes a student in highschool who can barely shoot a bow, but now that shes the daughter of a godess shes going to be alittle more powerful but not a stealthy kick butt ninja girl over night. Someone really smart once told me that for every good quality you give her, make her have a bad one too (so everyone can relate with her, itll draw more readers too if you show her growing in your story instead of magicly poofing to amazing in one chapter.) Also watch youre run ons. (im terrible with commas too...its so hard to put all your details you want without using a ton of commas lol..I know!...but less is more sometimes.....so, instead of putting 10 adjetives in, to describe what your seeing, limit yourself to 2 reallllllllyyyyy great ones lol).....I would suggest you find a beta. They are amazing people who have awsome grammer prowers-with a beta any story can sound 10 times better lol-.. (if you can not find one, i would love to beta for you. -just know im not amazing at it, I probably wont find all of your mistakes, but i can make it flow) .....And remember......this is just for fun :] ...so dont worry or stress over the small stuff, well get what your saying if you have one or two mistakes...... youre still learning!
-your friend mandy_26
(IF you need help my email is chickedee_26@yahoo.com, hope this helps you :)
Woo! Great Chapter! But I honestly hope Kagome puts up a good fight! I'm not fond of the thought of that mating collr and hope Kagome won't accept it! I can't wait for the two to meet up, and also for the next chapter!
Update soon!
JA NE!
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