Hi it's Venita, I'm just leaving a new review since I have account. The story is amazing and I enjoy it.
While I am enjoying your story so far, I do notice a few editing problems (in chapter 1 for example, Sesshomaru's thoughts state, "She was not worthy of the hanyou and deserved better," instead of "The Hanyou was not worthy of her, and she deserved better.)
I am also a little confused as to why Sango and Miroku call Inuyasha "half-breed," which I always thought was an offensive term toward half-demons in the IY universe. Despite their anger and frustration with him, I think it's a little out of character for them to insult his heritage, rather than his loyalty and generally stupid behavior. After all, will not Sesshomaru's and Kagome's children also be half-demon?
All that aside, you're doing a really good job illustrating the seven deadly sins and how several characters are guilty of them. Great story!
amy (Chapter 7) - Wed 22 Feb 2012
Well done, bravo, a new twist on their courtship, showing how the seven deadly sins apply to Inu, all of them, I love it!
Venita (Chapter 7) - Wed 22 Feb 2012
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