Yay! You got another chapter. Suprised me! Oh I forgot to add eariler Congrats on your nomination!!

I hope Sesshoumaru gets there in time... and I wonder what in the world their up to.

Ah school... the long time occupation. I wish you luck.

Great chapter!  I can't wait to find out who the target is and why.  Sessh to the rescue!

Another great chapter!! =)) keep it up!

Of course I'll leave a review! It was worth reading and I liked it. Can't wait for another chapter ^-^ It's another reason why I didn't actually add a review to the prievious ones... lol couldn't stop

Keep it coming.

oh, please! Sesshomaru save shippou, help kagome! do something!!!

What's going to heappen now? WIll Sesshoumaru save poor shippo? What about Kagome? I'm guessing that her dad was not happy with her. Than again. I don't think he ever is. Can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^

Wait! Why is she letting them take her away? And with how skilled a fighter she's been so far, how are they able to over power her? Who are these other wolves? I must know what happens next! :D

Wait! Why is she letting them take her away? And with how skilled a fighter she's been so far, how are they able to over power her? Who are these other wolves? I must know what happens next! :D

I'm guessing the othwe wolves are her servants and guards coming back to get her, right? Nice chapter. Very interesting. Update soon! :D

Keep it coming.

I'm guessing the largest black wolf is her father and the lighter brown one is Miroku?  I can't wait to read the next chapter and see what happens and how Sessh will handle the fact that the warrior lady, Kags, was whipped by her father.

Noooooooo!!!!!!! You can't stop there!!! You're so mean! I have to know what happens! Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Your writing is so fresh and funny. I really like it. (: Keep up the good work.

Noooo! Poor cute sweet little Shippou.  Love the story ^_^

this was awesome! please write more

I'm glad you finally updated it's been weeks, poor Shippou. Keep it coming.

Great job!! Reads much better but still has your voice behind it! 

It's much more detailed and the characters are fuller and more fleshed out.

I just went through and cleaned up the chapter. I tried to not restate suggestions but just fixed up some grammatical errors. 

Just a quick tutorial though, lol. I separated each specific correction into a section separated by ------------ that. If there are multiple errors that need the same corrections they will be in the same section, just located on a different line. The corrections for each section are notated with a *.

"wear magnificent pearls, splendid clothes, and pretty shoes."

*Delete Comma

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"What's frustrating is I have to be all of those people."

*Insert Comma

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It’s sad because people tend to ridicule half-breeds, they tend to loathe them so much.

*Repeated word

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he really hates half-breed

*breeds

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mate a powerful lord also he keeps telling me that I am 

*Insert period after "lord"; Capitalize "Also"

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She was a captive of a youkai and she was a priestess

they did it and I was conceived

*Insert Comma

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"Your sire will be so angry." Ah Chen mumbled

"I won't mate for his politics." I said, crossing my hands

 I'm just 16 years of age." I said childishly

mating age, my lady." She said in 

Alright." She said, a smile 

Heh." I laugh

*Change period into a comma

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Guards, Let us escort our Lady

*Uncapitalize

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Ah Chen!!!" I screams and run as fast as

*scream

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I hear butler Li shout.

*Capitalize

Keep it coming.