Keep it coming, Happy New Year!
These two are certainly coming along :] I can't wait for more progress between them. And I can certainly feel for Kagome, especially right now. I hate that part of being female. I can't wait for your next update :D I fell of the track for a little bit, but I made my way back, and now I'll all out of chapters :[
It's hard for me to see others not stand up for themselves, because I strongly believe in doing so. However, I see what she/you was/were saying about how doing something would've just made the situation worse for herself. It doesn't make it any easier, however. Hopefully she'll get a lot better sooner rather than later. I'll see you next chapter!
I love these two, I'm happy to see that things are progressing, and that Kagome is feeling better. I can't wait for when things move a little faster.
Awwww I loved this chapter. :3 Can't wait for more!
This is so cute and amazing and at the same time so depressing hehehehe
Update soon!!! Whenever you can :)
xoxo
Before I start reading this chapter, I only want to take my words back. You're writing is your own and it's great. You do tell the story well. Yes, you might have the "show, don't tell" problem, but we writers all have it.
I'm sorry if my former words seemed harsh. I was in a bitter mood and the fic was not what I expected. But I love it nonetheless.
Ok, off I go now. I can't stop reading :D
Wow... poor Kags
This is a very interesting plot... But I'm not 100% convinced as how Sesshomaru came up with the idea. I mean, I only mean to give constructive criticism and I hope you don't take this in the wrong way, but your way of writing doesn't really tell the story well. Have you heard of "show, don't tell" among writers? Well, you kinda 'tell' a little too much.
Like, describe a little more facial expressions and body language. At one point, I imagined Sesshomaru furrowing his brow while pondering the "proposal" in his apartment but it wasn't because you wrote him doing that.
And also, Kagome's dialogues....... I don't get it. Why are there so many hyphens and how do you pronounce "do-ne"? If she's running out of breath, I'm guessing perhaps you should make her pause to catch her breath or something... or like whisper instead of talk..... And one second her dialogue is full of hyphens and then the next, well, it's not, lol.
Give more descriptions of their actions to convey the tone and mood of the character instead of just rhetorical questions and wondering thoughts.
If you are offended or get upset from my review, I'm very sorry. You can PM me and tell me not to give you any more constructive criticism and I'll just fangirl my way through the rest of the chapters. :)
See ya later. Gotta continue reading Red Lotus :p
Really great chapter for the story. Hope schoool is going well. Up date when you can.
Cute :] I'm excited that she's finally settling in, but it's hard to see her struggling so much. It seems like Sesshomaru can't help but want to help her, too.
I feel bad for Kagome. I mean, I'm really happy, and the fact that she gets to continue to live is great, I just feel like it will be a monotonous life for a while. Hopefully it will get better soon. It also hit me that Inuyasha is really dead. Not a great thought at all.
I love these two, and for Sesshomaru to do this has to mean something, like Kagome said. I hope the mating takes place soon. I could not even imagine what it'd be like to be in her situation.
Thanks for writing, looking fwd to the next chapter as always-Happy New Yr!
I'm excited for this. It was a good first chapter, but extrememly sad. I hope everything looks up soon :[
It's been three months and three weeks since you last updated, I'm glad your back. Great chapter, keep it coming. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
Omg I'm really loving this story, the way you describe the emotional turmoil of Kagome is amazing! Also I love the pace you set for the story, it is really realistic! I can't wait for your next update! ;)
This was such a great update! We missed you so much, and the good writers of this site are almost all gone, so when I saw you had updated, it felt like a very special gift! Please don't stop writing, and update soon again, wether is with a beta or not! Happy New Year!
Ahhhh!!!!! I'm so excited you updated!!! I loved this! And poor Kagome what a horrible day indeed! And oh my goodness, I would have n web so embarrassed if that was me :( poor thing! But I'm glad she's starting to get better!
i hope school is going well for you!
-MissKatt
EagerEagerly to see what happens next and very much liking this story. More please.
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