OK...I'm really confused with this chapter.
First, you refer to the hut that Sango went into as having the scent of Kagome all over it when Sesshomaru enters, and Kagome is rather familiar with where things are..But, then you have them discussing Kagome's hut and wondering if it survived Naruku's destruction..then, Kagome is removing stuff from a basket she had on a high shelf!!!???
So, just how many huts does Kagome have?? This is one very confusing chapter. There has been some confusion in past chapters, and, I will tell you now that some of the grammar, and English (Ok, alot) leaves much to be desired, but the confusion in this chapter takes the cake!! If it wasn't for the wonderful storyline and plot, I probably would have given up on this fic a long time ago..I have very little tolerance for poor English, and poor grammar, and poor punctuation, and poor pronunciation.
Hey, wait a minute?? Where did this chapter come from? How come you didn't send it to me to read? Lol... I can't wait for you to come home and read this. I'll see you tomorrow kay?
nbdy (Chapter 1) - Sun 10 May 2009
how deliciously dark for a first chapter. I was surprised where you went with it. Very interesting i love it!
Suniko (Chapter 1) - Sun 10 May 2009
Yeah you updated!!!! I've been waiting for this chapter. Thank you! But I still want the rest. So please update fast as you can. Oh so what happen to inuyasha? Did he turn into full youkai cause he was there when she made that with? Well...anyway...I'll be waiting for the next chapter. Keep up the great work!
Suniko
Ashes (Chapter 24) - Wed 15 Apr 2009
Aaaahhh! *waits impatiently for the next chapter*
mia (Chapter 22) - Fri 03 Apr 2009
i say you should let sesshomaru tear inuyasha apart great story^-^ please update soon
Well I finally got caught up in reading this and I must say what a read. Great job. The way you showed Sesshy melting slowly but surely to become a more perfect man was awesome. Hm If more men were like him then there would be alot of children in the world.....lol great read
Tina (Chapter 21) - Tue 24 Mar 2009
love it and cant wait to find out what happens next!
Ashes (Chapter 20) - Fri 27 Feb 2009
I'm so happy you didn't abandon this story. I was actually thinking about it a few days ago.
You have a few grammer mistakes, mostly repeated words and forgotten verb endings.
But I love you imagery and am so excited to see where you go with your plot.
katlady (Chapter 8) - Sat 16 Aug 2008
Did you know that chapter 8 is missing completely its there but it has like one sentences..Please Fix
update soon!! make some1 kick inuyasha's ass pleeassse!
aiya!!!someone needs to kick inuyasha's stupid ass from the southern territory to the northern!!!and kikyo needs to die or be punched..somethin!!please update soon!!
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