If only they could take Miroku to Kagome's time and get him to a hospital!!! He would have a chance!
oh my gosh, he sliced off Miroku's arm!!!!!!! I did not see that coming btw... wow...
But omg... they got pulled into the wind tunnel! Now that I think about it... that's honestly a great idea, slicing off the arm, I mean... xD That's one way to fix the curse...
Tara (Chapter 1) - Sun 29 Oct 2017
Hi, started and completed this fic today. Really enjoyed the inner perspective writing style. The style added depth and character to the story. You're a skilled writer; well done. Thank you
| It is going to Kiiilll me to wait for a sequel, but I am so incredibly glad this isn't the end end. :) Favorited. (Also hoping for a better description of Inu-Takeshi? Like, does he have any ofLorf Stickuphisbutt's stripes? Or crescent moon? Or kagome's purity? <:D)
| Embarassingly, I'm having quite a few typos myself, but I do hope you understand I comment in the hopes of helping. That being said, Inuyasha's speech was extremely well thought out. Though, because of the discrepancy between his character before and the one shown since Kagome and Sesshomaru's "deaths", I wish there was more of a transition in character for him, maybe through his POV, despite the fact this fanfic is centered on Sesskag...
| The mistakes I saw this time were "were are" at the beginning of the chapter, "not" instead of "naught", and you have a tendency of making mistakes with punctuations. For instance, you'll split a sentence two make sentence fragments, for whatever reason. You also start many sentences as questions with interrogatives (such as "what") then you end the sentence with a period. I'm saying all this as constructive criticism so you can fix it and improve. Still an intriguing plot! :)
| I'm intrigued by the voice you write this story in; that is to say, I dom't hate it, but I don't love it either. I do feel the flow would be better if you connected the flashback and the prelude of every chapter a little better. Instead of "Flashback:" which momentarily jolts you back to reality after intently listening to Kagome muse and share her thoughts, maybe italics or quotations in certains parts? Also, there are minor typos here and there. Other than that, can honestly say I'm being drawn to your Void. (Heehee, get it?)
amy (Chapter 19) - Sat 04 Jun 2011
Wonderful please write the sequel.
JFrost (Chapter 19) - Wed 06 Apr 2011
Hmmmm. This story captured me right from the start. I really liked it. But...the ending was a real downer. I'm torn between liking it for being original and more realistic than any other story, and wishing it had a happy ending. I could never say you were wrong for the ending because it's realistic, but I wish there was an 'alternate ending' where things turn out all happy.
Thanks for this story. It was really good and well written.
Shena (Chapter 19) - Tue 18 Jan 2011
i loved everything about your stories I found one the I am Alpha one and just had to read more of your writings this is the resent on i have read and like all the others its great and i cant wait for the sequel I can only hope that the story i am working on (though its not sessh/kagome story) is or turns out as great as yours
it was a pleasure reading your stories and for me to have a short attention spand i did not skip one part n any of your stories
Karlie (Chapter 19) - Sat 01 Jan 2011
| To change the past or to change past transgressions.
Pebbs (Chapter 8) - Sat 24 Jul 2010
I am still reading but I must say something about this chapter. Oh. My. God. I have never read anything where Inuyasha's monolouge left my mouth hanging on the ground and I was tripping over it and slipping from the drool coming from my mouth. That was AMAZING. He spoke with such clarity and resignation that I must bow to you. And bow low I will till I hit the floor underneath me! Their 'deaths' have matured him to the point that I didn't recognize him anymore. No gruffness, no crudeness. Just clarity. Clarity of mind and spirit. His strength is flowing off of him in waves. So much has gone into this story and I'm so intrigued by what's going on. You have made a fan out of me. You, my dear....ROCK!
Although some parts were confusing, I still thought the whole story was amazing. It made me cry too. I was also surprised at myself that I didn't hate Sesshoumaru at all despite the things he did. I pitied him, and when I was crying, part of it was for him.
The lemon was amazing too! Since Sesshoumaru was so in character, I found it more exciting. ^^
Nyuka (Chapter 19) - Sun 13 Jun 2010
I dont' know if you've already started writing it sinse I'm reading we are mates as we'll I don't think you have, I'll check after I write this XP, anyway I think a good title for the sequel could be something like "Kagome my void" or "The void of time" or some kind of compination of the two like "Kagome time is but a void between us" okey that last one was a bit cheese but you get where I'm coming from right? Using the previous story title to help the reader understand where the sequel is coming from....from the little summary I guessed that he was some how going to turn back time to correct his misstake, and I probably said this or something different in a different review but my minds now with me at the moment .... the story takes hold....XD......................Nyuka
WOW! All I can say is ...wow. I laughed, I definitely cried, and wanted to strangle sesshomaru. You portrayed them acturately and it was well written. Nicely planned, well paced and good detail! You did a great job! I'm glad to hear there is a possible sequel in the works. I can't wait to read it and look forward to sesshomaru and kagome actually being together!! Keep writing!
Hesunohana (Chapter 19) - Wed 31 Mar 2010
well, I loved both the wrinting and the plot. the book idea was great ! I think the characters were quite well-respected too.
so, maybe, even if Kagome is dead, I'll read the sequel.
Liked it, it was interesting. I can't wait for your sequeal. Humm... As for any title ideas... 'Walls'? 'Rewind'? XD I only suggested walls coz Sesshoumaru is trapped? Stuck in the void in his heart in which he tries to go and change history (thus rewind) and to do that he had to overcome many closed off walls?
LOL, sorry, that title seems lame. Hummmm...
'Changing the void'? < If you want to keep with the continuation of void being in the title. Err, Changing the void - Changing the past - To change the hole created with in his heart < Short summary on why it could be that title.
'Hollow Heart'? Haha, anyways up to you. Hope to see a sequeal up soon! :D
~SxT
hey this story was awesum....totally enjoyed it but a lil sad that kags had to die especially of old age... :(....anyways great story and PLEASE hit me up when u make ur sequel cuz i would greatly enjoy and appreciate it....LUV YAY :P
wow your completely right! i forgot about the Noh Mask..... yeah well I REALLY love your story!
(Chapter 19) - Sat 31 Oct 2009
Oh bloody hell this is one of the very few angst stories that I have read and enjoyed... so glad to hear there is a sequel in the works!
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