Awesome chapter and great advice from Inupapa....
Um... -clears throat- I've got a few questions. Is this going to have a semblance ot the series InuYasha? Because in the tomb, well just outside of it, Inuyasha was able to transform Tessaiga and slice off his left arm. Which with any person it would leave them nearly passed our, passed out, dead, or delearious. Thus leaving him injured to the point of having to stay still for weeks. That was when Rin finds him and tries to help him. Without that he wouldn't have met Rin or brought a two headed dragon steed. Which lead to also his learning of a growing compassion for others out of that chain reaction.
Was Rin going to be in your story with him? Does he still have his left arm? Because how you had written in the begining was, that the figh had just happened during that day, and that night he had just come up to talk? Didn't make much sense...
Were you going to skip all of their upcoming encounters? The ones that counted most in the begining. You know that kind of set off the rest of events. lol I guess you could turn chapter one into three if you so wished.
Near the middle and end. That's just conniving. (his plan) Calling the others baggage? -blinks- Sounds so... selfish. -waves a hand to the side- I didn't mean to make anything sound mean it was just my thoughts on your story so far. From a writers perspective and a reader.
Other than a few grammar and spelling errors and that you could add a little more detail. you did pretty good. You don't have to worry as much. Expecially if you write because you like to. ^-^
Maybe they could look at Midoriko's sword and find what it is made of.
I loved it! The idea of her using the katana with her powers reminds me of your other story with the Phoenix symbolism. I like it though. This one seems better because the sword would be made for her and her alone. I also really like the idea of Sesshomaru using one of his fangs for such a thing. Maybe Sesshomaru can learn and make it for her himself. Or maybe the'll run across someone who knows someone who can do it. Maybe they can go consult the tree demon? Anyway, I also loved that Kagome is starting to think in relationship terms towards Sesshomaru, and can't wait to see what she comes up with to let him know that she's interested. Can't wait for more. Hope you update soon. :-)
rose (Chapter 8) - Thu 18 Apr 2013
next chapter please
Denise (Chapter 8) - Thu 18 Apr 2013
I am liking the story. I can't wait to see what happens when they meet up with Inuyasha. So exiting. Keep up the good work!!!
Love the chapter and the thought behind it. Showing the playfulness is awesome, and even more showing how Sesshomaru cares enough to teach her where she can learn her way, is just awesome.
Even better is the fact she is finally seeing him in the way she should be!! Yes!!!
And if anyone can think of a way for Sesshomaru to get her a katana would be him. Love it and it was freaking awesome way for me to get the chapter. I love it!
Keep it coming.
tonya (Chapter 8) - Thu 18 Apr 2013
loving this story! looking forward to the next chapter
rose (Chapter 7) - Sun 14 Apr 2013
next chapter please
TKE (Chapter 7) - Sun 07 Apr 2013
very interesting story, i'm enjoying it very much!
Keep it coming.
Ah. I've been waiting for this update. I liked it a lot. I'm glad we got to see Inuyasha's reaction to not being able to get through the well. I also like that Sesshomaru had someone there watching to report back to them. I wonder if Miroku will figure out that Kagome hasn't left for good before Inuyasha does. I just figure with him knowing that Kaede knows something he will be thinking more on the situation. Even more so since they won't be able to help not thinking about it. Will we get to see a time soon where Kagome goes home? I believe if I remember correctly, she hasn't informed her family of what is happening with her, and I'm hoping we can see that? I'm also wondering if we will see a scene where Inuyasha and the rest have their first fight without Kagome there to help. I would like to see how that goes.
Now the scene with Kagome and Sesshomaru was nice and I can't wait for more of them. I would definitely like to see the two of them dance. On another note, I remember Sesshomaru mentioning that he thought Kagome knew that he was interested in her as more then a friend. Is that true on Kagome's end? Or does she think he's just being a seriously protective friend? Can't wait for more. Please update soon.=)
Thank you for the update. Eagerly anticipating them getting back to the hunt and what trouble Kagome will end up finding.
please continue! i like this side of sesshomaru. it shows he has a kind side. he can still ruthless in battles but gentle with certain beings. i'll be waiting for the next chapters.
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