Your story doesn't flow. Your jumping around to much. Your charactor's plot don't make much sense. Half way through this chapter and I'm getting a headach from trying to figure out what going on.

Im sorry I'm just jumping in now. I must have missed the initial email. That was a cute little diversion. I'm kind of surprised Inuyasha had any fangs left after this comments. I'm sorry to see it end. I guess Kagome will never have enough folate in her diet.

This story was great, Happy Belated Valentine's Day!