Well you did a nice job and since it seems to be a one shot, that's fine. Nice and I like the Medieval setting. The only thing that was awry was that he saved her and betrothed her the same day and she was 13, then on the marriage day, 10 years later, she is 25, should be 23. But that's a quibble. Nice story, cheers!
Well u say u are revoming ur lemons from stories but this one was bad. I like lemons and get disappointed after reading for so long n there is no lemon. So no offense I will keep ur name in mind so I do not read ur stories without lemons. Thanks for the heads up
So I literally just read your KakaxSaku version of this on FF the other day, and I was like wait what: this sound's familiar! I loved both versions (though I'll admit the KakaxSaku one won me over first and is my favorite). It was nice, short, sweet, and enjoyable :)
That was good and nice. The leamon wasn't bad you should reconsider removing them from your other stories. You know they say practice. Makes perfect.
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