Your story is very original and had the potential to be extremely great. Through out most of the story it felt like it was missing something and it is extremely choppy, just didn't flow like it should have. I don't get the point of that ending, what purpose did it serve? It really sucked. I would suggest getting a beta reader because you have way too many typos. What was Sesshoumaru's wish?

I really hope that you decide to update this story. I woud love tosee what happens next!

I really liked the story, and it didn't turn out as dark as I thought it would be so I"m glad. Have you considered a sequel to the story? Maybe, she remembers him and returns to that era, or they meet in the future? I kinda got the feeling from your writing that Kagome started to love Sesshoumaru, so I kind of hate the idea of the story stopping there. Of course you're the author, but what do you think?

I really liked the story, and it didn't turn out as dark as I thought it would be so I"m glad. Have you considered a sequel to the story? Maybe, she remembers him and returns to that era, or they meet in the future? I kinda got the feeling from your writing that Kagome started to love Sesshoumaru, so I kind of hate the idea of the story stopping there. Of course you're the author, but what do you think?

oh kami, you have no idea how surprised i was at that ending... the pups dieing, her leaving... i was so... upset. bit i loved it too!
beautiful story! i adore it!

Interesting story but that is a F**ked up ending my friend f**ked up.

Hello,

very sad ff you have here... I would change the genre though... to tragedy(drama)/romance

cause in the end the sons die and the lovers are seperated...

*cry*

I will read all your other ffs!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

hey i want more it cant just end like this !!!!

Hi, this is a very intrigueing fanfic. Aside from some grammatical errors, it is by far on of the better ones i have read. :) you've done an excellent portrayal of the actual characters as well as your own. I really do like it although sometimes Sesshomaru is OOC..i've never known him to be one for "showing emotion" but you make him loveable without making him a complete marshmellow. lol...anyways, I was hoping i could ask you if i could draw your characters, Sess and Kagome's sons?? Let me know. :) Thanks.
~3 Lisa

Nooo, it cant be over!! Do a sequel! Quick!

But on a more serious note, that fanfiction, while good and more original than some I've seen, had the most typos and errors I've seen in a while. You kept spelling 'Youkai' 'youki' and while the words sound similar enough, youkai is demon, and youki is demonic energy. You also have a habit of dropping H's when they're next to S's, like in Higurashi in one of the first chapters, and another word that I dont remember. I dont remember which chapter this was in, but you said 'mine as well' where the word MIGHT is the correct one, and those are just a few errors. You might want to get a beta.

On a side note, I left a note in another writers reviews about how she needed to get a beta, and she replied with while she agreed that there were mistakes, having to do all that work, meaning reading through the chapter more than twice, would annoy and bore her. The reason I was annoyed by this was the fact that if you dont care enough to go through your fanfiction and fix the mistakes, and get annoyed by having to read it again if you use a beta, this tends to show the readers you dont really care about your work. I didnt say this to her, of course, I think this is probably rude for me to say, even to you who hasnt even answered me and if you think this is rude I do apologize, but I happen to feel that not perfecting something you stay up late to finish is a waste of time to begin with. Why write the darn fic if you're not going to make sure its the best it can be?

Again, sorry, it might seem like I wanted to rant, and a little part of me did, but somewhere in there was some constructive criticism, I think. ^-^;; If you feel like replying to me, I'm not sure if this thing actually gives you my email since it doesnt show a link up there so email me at italiansweetie1985@yahoo.com. I do beta for people so if you need one, let me know, k? :--Saeko

That can't be it!

I had really enjoyed this story. However, I very disappointed in the ending.

wowow great fic update soon

I don't get the ending. What did Sesshomaru wish for????

i feel as if i should really hate you. the ending made me cry. i can't believe you did that. but it was very original and a really great story.

oh great, don't tell me that sesshomaru wished they had never been mated??? arrrggg!!!! i love your story, but it's driving me CRAZY!!!! @.@

OMG THIS IS A HELLA GOOD STORI ... THIS LAST CHAPTER WAS SCARY AND NERVERACKIN ND DAMN IT WAS JUS EMOTIONAL ... CANT WAIT TO SEE WUTS GON HAPPEN NEXT ...1

omg!!! this is so not right... the four of them were supposed to live happily ever after, or at least the three of them... grr... sessho and kags are supposed to be together this must be fixed!!!

It's a great stroy. Are you going to make a sequel or just leave it like that? It would be great if you made a sequel but nobody can tell you what to do. I love it. It's one of my favs now.

I loved your story I just don't like how the last ch. went. But anyway keep up the good work. I can't wait to read more of your stories.

Wow this is a great chapter and surprising.Update soon.

Please update asap!

Well it has lots of problems spelling/word choice-wise but the plot is pretty good. In most cases you have where [place related; noun] instead of were [past tense of was; verb]. Hope this helps.

Yeah, another chapter...I love this story.....your character of KaggSess sons are so good....Hope you can write more soon :)

wow! please update soon... this story is very interesting!

OMG you updated!! woot! I had to go re read the entire thing just to remember what happened! Poor Engetsu. Stupid Kumo. *Kicks Kumo* write more!

OMG you updated!! woot! I had to go re read the entire thing just to remember what happened! Poor Engetsu. Stupid Kumo. *Kicks Kumo* write more!

OOO! i love your story it is sooo kewl! plz plz update soon!

God I loved This fic !! Please update soon !

Uh I have better nems for the two sons.Isamo & Kenta both prefect for the sons of the western lord.

Having a puppy is no excuse. lol. You must continue to write more and not leave us hanging. Good chapter

Ok I know that you just said dont kill me for ending the story but I think that i will. You MUST continue a.s.a.p! Though I'm one to talk.(mumbles something about having to update my own stories) Keep up the good work!

hey i love u'r fic and i hope to read more it's getting really interesting but here's a question how was kumo born if the father is naraku who's the mother if i think about it he's a half breed so the mother would have to be a full demon or a half breed right oh well i'm so full of questions today lol

This is very good. It is well written and I like the direction the story is taking so far. Please update soon.