So far I'm really enjoying this story... but it's somewhat hard to follow at times :-\ I love your writing, but I think you should probably get a beta for your next story or even to help you revise this one. The flow's a little off and sometimes feels rushed, and the grammar could use some work.
Otherwise, though, I love the story, the plot, and the characterizations are good. :-)
Megan Consoer- Wed 05 Sep 2007
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some chapters?
tsukiyomi- Mon 25 Jun 2007
sequel please i loved the story
A-Dog- Wed 27 Dec 2006
That was a great story but for your next one watch for grammatical errors
K.M.- Fri 08 Dec 2006
wow what a great stroy!! I really liked it and hope you write more fics soon.
Megan Consoer- Thu 01 Jun 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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