you have to post more chapters soon its so fun to read.

More chapters please:)

this is awesome i love it!!!

Well its really good. You should probably read through it yourself since some of the words you used weren't the ones you wanted to use. Microsoft doesn't pick that crap up, so it's not your fault. Wraith instead of wrath. It's alright I had to reread my one chapter ten times to get them all.
Good luck and finish it!