Hey, it's me again. I know I follow you all over the place. Um, I know this fic is finished, but it was SUCH a beautiful fic, and so unusual, I think it would be great if you made a sequel (but not at the expense of Visions!!) Anyway, just wanted to let you know that you've started a ball that I think will get bigger and better the more you add. Again, thank you for this story; it is so beautiful it actually brings tears to my eyes.
helleboros- Sat 26 Jan 2008
Hmm ... not bad. Quite entertaining actually, but you might want to watch the predictability of your plots. I certainly haven't read all your fics yet, but the ones I have read all end the same way. Kagome's miko powers come to the rescue and all other people--Sesshomaru included--are utterly irrelevant to her winning the day. I got to the end of this story and it was just so obvious what was going to happen that I didn't even have to read the last chapter to know how Naraku would be defeated. Also, while you certainly don't want to wrap everything up *too* neatly, that doesn't mean it's okay to leave huge plot-holes lying around. I, for one, find it very hard to believe that a whole hoard of demons managed to get within shouting distance of Sesshomaru's building, let alone into his apartment and bedroom, without him noticing before they got Kagome in their clutches. That's one plot twist that certainly required at least a little more exposition.
*cries* thats it?? Your so cruel
Good story; but I also wished it could have lasted longer. I guess I just enjoy Sesshomaru/Kagome pairings so much! Keep up the good work!
Astrid- Mon 10 Jul 2006
that was really good, I've never seen an inuysha fic, from that persective, making kagome and inuyasha unable to hear or speak without sighn was a good part of the story it really made it realer. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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