Creativity/Originality: 4
It's a PWP fic. Enough said.
Style/Flow/Organization: 7
At the very least, there weren't any crippling plot holes or horrible paragraphing.
Characterizations: 2
If Naraku had all his greatest enemies in one place, he'd kill then, and he'd win. End of story. I could understand if he raped Kagome but forcing her to have sex with the supermodel of the InuYasha series? Oh the horror.
Spelling Grammar: 9
Didn't spot any horrible mistakes in this section at least.
Overall: 5
Average. Not good. Not bad. Just average.
snowbird- Thu 04 Oct 2007
I have to admit that you've outdone everyone on an original plot. It's very different and smutty. I love it. I'd say Sess's problem is that his honor and pride were violated. In fact, I guess you could call what happened to him and Kag could be called a form of rape since they were forced to perform for Naraku. He's having to deal with a lot of mixed up emotions internally. It's hard for someone like him to deal with being exposed emotionally. Now on the lighter side, I thought it absolutely hilarious at Kag's thoughts and approach at giving Sess a blow job. You never made it clear whether they got their clothes back or not. Are they still naked a week later? Also, what are Kag's thoughts at losing her virginity in such a humiliating way. Hey! You know whatl. It'd really be something if Kag became pregnant from their forced rutting.
When are you going to update. Please don't forget this story.
Megan Consoer- Mon 03 Sep 2007
| I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
SilentThunderstorm- Thu 02 Aug 2007
hentai not just kidding keepit up i like the shout chapters
| this was awsome...poor Kagome....
the western lands heirs lady ky- Mon 16 Jul 2007
| when are you going to update I'm dying to know what happens, why did Naraku do that? why is Kagome sesshomaru's problem? please up date soon!
Sicilia- Wed 11 Jul 2007
| sounds very interesting :)
Sicilia- Wed 11 Jul 2007
| sounds very interesting :)
naru- Tue 10 Jul 2007
| Yes the wait was worth it but try to make it a bit longer. PLEASE@!!!!
| Awwww I'm Glad Miroku Proposed!!!! But Sesshomaru Is Acting Like a Bastard!! Please Update As Soon As U Can! ^_^
toni- Mon 09 Jul 2007
| it is kinky.. i give it that.. definitely a 10 on originality and cahracter
| -Flails.- Please oh please update I beg of you! I love this story so delicious and sinful and just awesome! So when will Sesshoumaru get to play?
black moon inu- Tue 03 Jul 2007
WOW that pretty much covers it I wonder if sesshoumaru's mad a her for saying yes, wow. Well I wouldn't mind being chained to sesshoumaru not the naraku stuff ~shivers~ But I'd want to start out clothed first. I don't think any one would mind being chained to him ~sighs~. Well Post soon.
hugs and puppies
| That's so cruel...I can't believe you'd just leave a sistah' hanging like that! That's low! But...you can make it up by updating speedy quick! *STARES* and I mean quick. (The punishment isn't really all that bad...hee hee. I'm a perv, yeah, I know.)
This Is a Good Story So Far. Please Update As Soon As U Can!!!!
Peace, Luv, and Chains,
Kagome-Chan
soooooowut- Mon 02 Jul 2007
| plzzzzzzzzz continue the chapter im loving it already:D Oh yeah and ur a great writer
Crys777- Mon 02 Jul 2007
( Anima Big face with eye twich) .............
There's no next chapter yeat................
I want more SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON.
naru- Mon 02 Jul 2007
| Update realy soo and I won't abandon u?? DEAL??
suki- Thu 26 Apr 2007
| ....XDDD i love it -3- please update thats a pretty good idea its acully funny at the same time...I dont know why im laughing but ya...XD
shrinemaiden05- Sat 07 Apr 2007
| whats next....
j- Mon 22 Jan 2007
| are you going to update or...... do you like messing with readers. keeping them on edge for the next chatper. i want to know.. other than that this is a very well written and great story flow keep up the good work ^_^.
Yumi235- Tue 05 Dec 2006
| you cant stop there......left on a cliff hanger. Great story so far can't wait for next chapter.
Miko- Tue 05 Dec 2006
| Awesome story, want ot know what happens next, left me on a cliff hanger must update ASAP.
j rida- Tue 05 Dec 2006
Awesome story left on a cliff hanger must update now
love your work
Kambri_Jade- Mon 04 Dec 2006
I have read alot of dark fics but there is only a select few that have caught my interest to want to go on reading it, and this I can tell will be one of them! Keep up the fantastic work, and UPDATE ASAP!!! ( you had to have such a big cliff hanger? Grrrr. Yeah, I'm growling at you! lol ) so yeah, please update soon, its really great!
Later,
Kambri_Jade
AW555- Mon 04 Dec 2006
| Sounds good so far! It kind of reminds me of this other fic I read but I hope this one ends better XD. Can't wait for the next chapter!
scryed217- Sun 03 Dec 2006
hey! u can't stop there...lol...
keep it flowing....lol...no love 4 Kagome...poor girl being touch by HIM...
christten- Sun 03 Dec 2006
this soundz so good plz finish i like where dis iz goin
jestergirl- Sun 03 Dec 2006
| Hey, i like the start of the story,please update soon, i hate cliffhangers
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