that was really good i like it, like all your stories that i've read so far ^_^ i can't wait for the next one

I LOVE this story. you should fix the spelling though.

How can Sango be 21 and Kagome be 20, when you said they were born a week apart? Anyway, this chapter made crack up soooo much!!!! I luv the story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

i really love your story it is really great. i luv when everybody got to geather and they all love each other and all of the children sound so beautiful but keep up the good work and writing the best maru and kagome fanfiction

WOW! That is all I can say. that was the best story I have read inthe last year I hope u keep writing I will keep reading them! Ands agine WOW love it.

Woot Woot. Sesshy and Kaggie got it on eh? well it was a nice story

good story.

Kikyo: Evil

Inuyasha: Eri

Jakotsu: Kouga

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!

Wonderfull finish. Just delicious.
I can't hardly wait till you decide on your next story. Thank you and keep writing cause you are realy good.

yes
eri
kouga

I LOVE THIS STORY
please start another one soon
=)

wow. to answer your questions...
yes
eri
inu-yasha
i loved this story

Happy, happy birdhday and congratulation.
Now I loved the way Sango and Kagome gave birth in the same day and I can hardly wait till everybody has his/her cildren (I mean Inuyasha and the other ones).
Again happy birdhday and please update as soon as you can.

Hey....I Noticed a LOT of Simalarities Between My 'Sparks Will Fly' Story and This Story....It's Ok 2 Get Ideas From me, But Warn Me Next Time K?

first off.....HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!! ^_^

second, =(...its comng to an end!!!

third:

Kikyou: evil

Inuyasha: Eri

Jakostu: Inuyasha (stick with the script)

hope you have fun on ur brithday! =)

Kikyo evil: Yes
Inuyasha with: Eri
Jakotsu likes: Inuyasha

Ooo Happy Birthday!! ^_^

-River

Hey, I am so sorry I didn’t review for the last chapter! My Internet got a virus and well, it wasn’t working! I read it though and it was GREAT!!!

This chapter, was AMAZING!! I love the whole accident and the whole daddy news! So sweeettttttttttt!! =D

PWEEEEEEEEEZ PWEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK YOU!!! ^_^

P.S. once again I am SOOOO sorry I couldn’t review the last chapter

P.P.S. lemons pweez =)

I feel bad because I hadn't reviewed in a while. Well, I have now! This is great! You are doing such a good job! ^_^

-River

I WUV IT!!!!!!.....so far......!

That was a really good one, I havent read anything like it and I read a whole lot of these I'm lookin forward to reading more!

Another great chapter. Please continue to amaze me soo soon with another update.Thank you far writing.

awww!!!!!! that was soo KAWAII!! ^_^

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK YOU!! =D

P.S. lemons pweez

This was realy goood. Please continue the good job and update as soon as you can.

This fanfic is so sweet! I enjoy reading it ^_^

-River

WAT AN AWESOME TWIST!!!!!! ELEMENT SISTER!!! THAT IS SOO KOOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

U GOTTA CONTINUE!!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE CONTINUE N THANK YOU!!! ^_^


p.s. lemons pweeez

He he he it was not Naraku but his son. You fooled me (no ofense taken). I loved the twist in the story. I can't hardly wait to see the next chapter. So please update soooon.

Aha that was wrong with Hojo, he was Naraku. That was an interesting twist in the story. Now will be able Sesshoumaru to protect his mate and pups. Oups silly me off course he is!!
Anyway I enjoyed this chapter so please update sooooon!

I really do love this story. The chapters seem to be a little too short, but I can understand balancing time with everything else, Keep up the good work!

I loved the first 2 chapters that u wrote. Keep up the good work.

Hojo is pretty creepy, especially if he's all nice and smiley like that. *shivers* Creeepy...Good job!

-River

I always found Hojo quite anonnying so I don't mind!! =)

I personally found this chapter very good! the last part was soo good!!!! turns out Hojo is not Hojo, I think? I wonder who he is???

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK YOU!!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweeeeez

OMG! What are you thinking ending that like that! That was just...just...uncalled for...Oh well, it was a great (if not a little short) chapter, but I loved it! So keep up the awesome work!

What? She balcked out? Why? What did Hojo do to her? What sort of connection does he have with her?....Man, so many questions , so little time...

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK YOU!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweez

AYAYAYYAYAYAYYYAYYYAYA MORE DRAMA YAYAYAAYAYAYYAYAAYAYYYAYA okay now UpDaTe ThX

Woah, what is Hojo doing there. No! No cliffy! Update soon!

-River

COOLIEO DUDE!!!!!!!!! I love update plz.

Hi Sesshous_girl!!

Please update more soon I can't wait for the surprise and what will happen with hojo!!!

bye!!!

Hi Sesshous_girl!!

Please update more soon I can't wait for the surprise and what will happen with hojo!!!

bye!!!

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uPdaTe!! pLeaSe?? i LoVe iT!!

ThaNkS^^

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i have a feeling Hojo isnt who he seems he is....

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK YOU!!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweez

MMM can't wait till tomorrow. Hope to see what's wrong with Hojo. Don't exhaust yourself just write for fun.

Awe, isn't Fluffy sweet!!!!

man, Sesshomaru is the PERFECT HUSBAND!!! Kagome is SO lucky!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK YOU!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweeez

P.P.S. i noe wat Inuyasha and Kanna are doing *wiggles eyebrows* ^_-

LOL now all we need is the kids gone a lil less clothing and tada sex lol jk update

OMG, OMG this was so sweeet. Thank you for updating so soon , please keep doing it because I become dependant to your story and it's sweetness.

This is such a sweet chapter! Good Job!

-River

WOW AWESOME STORY!!!!

Keep it up!

I wonder what's in the box... I'm curious.

PLEASE UPDATE ASAP ... and more lemons if you would be so kind.

Thanks!!!!

OMG!! WATS IN THE BOX!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!????

I WANNA KNOW SOOOOOOOOOO BADLY!!!!!!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweeeeez =D

P.P.S. kepp it up!

HEY CHICKY What up? OMG good job. love it update or else ill come to your house and poke you until everyone gets another chappie thx

How many pups??? I lost track!
Anyway interesting as usual. Please let me congratulate you for your imagination and quick update and also thank you.

Nice chapter! I do not remember if I had sent a review last chapter so I apologize if I didn't.

-River

PLease continue this soon

keep up the good work

WAT AN AWESOME CHAPTER!!!

I thot Kagome was going to have a miscarriage, THANK GOD that didnt happen!! =)....i cant believe she's having PUPS!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweez =D

I hope you will remember soon the rest, otherwise I'll be dead like the curious cat that I am.
Now seriously I enjoid this chapter so pleaaasee update sooon.

Nice and delicate. I love it. Keep up the good work.

That was a really sweet chapter!

-River

AWWW!!!!! VERY SWEET!!!! and unexpected of Inuyasha =S!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!! =)

P.S. sowwie its a short review


P.P.S lemons pweez

Hey Chica,

DUDE WHAT WAS THAT ALL ABOUT?????????? @.@ #(0).(0)

TOOOOOOOO SHORT!!!!!!!!! OKay other than that good job.

only one word......awsome.

hi that was really good

hey. i have one Question how is kagoma sister of the east

AWESOMENESS!!!!!!!!

Well, Naraku is dead, Kagome and Sesshomaru are going to get married. There is nothing that can spoil this happy moment, right?

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!! ^_^

P.S. more lemons pweez

Nice chapter. Can't wait for the update.

-River

KEEP IT UP!!!!!! ^_^

-Sadiya 3

thank you for answering my questions!!!! ^_^

THAT WAS A QWAZZZY CHAPTER!!!!!!! Man, Naraku is one comitted guy wen it comes to Kagome.......or he's just REALLY sick!!!!!

Now, Kagome has been caputered by Naraku and I have pweety good feeling I know wat he wants from her *wiggles eyebrows, but is very worrried for Kagome*. Sesshomaru is probably going to ip Naraku apart and then feed him to the dogs wen he finds out wat Naraku plans to do with his Kagome! XD!! Man, this story keeps on getting better and better!!!!!!! =)

also, i have 1 question:
1)Can they have a girl as their first born child? PWEEEEEZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Pweeeeez consider it, but you can name the girl anything you want!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! ^_^

P.S. more lemons pweez

Deb here again. LOVERZ IT!!!!!!! Now wonder what happens and have you been holding back on me with your awesome demon powers? I was never told you wrote THIS GOOD o.o 0.0 O.O @.@ lol

You make a wedding seem soooo easy! lol...I'm really enjoying this fic. I can't wait to see how Naraku takes this, and how Sess and Kag deal with the symtoms of pregnancy! Keep up the good work!!!

UR WELCUM!!!!! =D.........KEEP IT UP!!! *thumbs up*

WAT AN AWESOME CHAPTER!!! A WEDDING!!!! I LOVE WEDDINGS!!!!!!!!....buh i guess its a bad thing now for Yura, because now, Sesshomaru is off-the-market for GOOD!

hey i wanted to ask u 2 questions:
1) Will Naraku come back?
2) Do you plan on taking this story into the future?.....wat i mean is like with Sesshomaru with a job and Kagome with kids?

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweeeeez =)

P.P.S. keep it up =D

Deb here. LOVER IT!!!!!!!!!! Now time to update and http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AxTtkCu9Zek
WATCH this it's my first amv.

Oh yea, I love long chapters...even though they are hard to do at times. Good job once again! ^_-

-River

omg, i love this story, i look forward to the next chapter, and i love all the looks you have for these ppl and items, are you a demon yourself?

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Ahh..New ChaPter!! I LoVe It!!

UpdaTe sOoN!! ThaNks!!

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OMG!!!! SHE'S PREGNANT!!!!!!!
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

WOW!!!!! WAT AN AWESOME TWIST!!

THE LEMON WAS HOT N SEXY!!!!!!!!!! i love lemons with dialogue!!!!!!!!! i hotta write more....and, you are getting better at it!!! =)


PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!!! ^_^

p.s. MORE LEMONS PWEEEEZ =)

*********FAINT*********** OMFG SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Kawaii.

Beautifull. This is all that I can tell you right know.

Great story and i can't wait for the next chapter.
Sakura

Nice lemon. I hope you update soon!

-River

please write more about sesshomaru and kagome. i really like this story.

awesomeness!!!!!!! =D

that was intense!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

man, Naraku is sooo sick!!! and Sesshomaru is my hero! =)

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! =)

P.S. lemons pweeeeeeez =)

love it love it love it... great job... keep up the good work..

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Hey ThaNkiEs FoR tHe ChaPY!! I

Love iT!!! PleAsE UpDaTe SoOn!!!

ThaNKs!!

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You got Kags personilty really CLose,and ya it was still cool!!!!
Bye,
Faby

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

*Blink Blink* O ... M ... G......... UPDATE YOU FREAKING MEAN CHICKY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AND I MEAN NOWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! So this was good and you did better at this
on spelling and grammar.

PLEASE DON'T LEAVE US HANGING LIKE THAT!!! WHAT'S SHE GOING TO SAY?! TELL US NOW!!!! UPDATE, UPDATE, UPDATE!!!!

I wonder what Kagome is going to say? Lol Thanks for the reconition! ^_^

-River

update update update please

DAMN IT... I dropped my pen. lol SOOOOOOOO OMFG this is deb AND GIRL YOU"D BETTER UPDATE. P.S. Your beta needs to look closer I saw mistakes small but if i was a real editor which i am you'd have one fired story. CHOW chow chow CHESEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE lol UpDaTe NoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

OMG!!!!! THAT WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!

I wonder wat the mystery person will do to Kagome and how Sesshomaru will get Kagome back!

ur lemon was AWESOME!!!!!!! short buh HOT! MORE!!!! MORE!!!!!!!!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEZ PWEEEEEEEEEZ PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ PWEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! ^_^

P.S. more lemons pweeeeeeeeez =D

Aww lol that was sweet Sesshoumaru. Nice lemon. ^_-

-River

Such a pleasing story. It's very good. You brightened my day.

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HeY Sis I lOve It!! PleaSe UpdaTe

SOon!!

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k this is really getting good can you please write more please

coldlie

coodlie

ur welcum!!! ^_^

and...i CANT WAIT for the lemons!!!! =)


P.S. if u need any help...juss e-mail me and ill be here =D

OOh yea! I can't wait for the lemon!

-River

update update update please

Hey this story pretty cool. I can't wait for the next chapter. Sorry but I can't seem to hate when people put in lemons I love it. I'm the little hentai, well not so little.

hugs and puppies

Oooh...ear-licking. That's hawt :P Update soon please.

Also, I see that one reviewer below me gave you a couple of pointers. Just wanted to say that if you needed a beta, I'd be happy to do so. Just shoot me a message if you are interested. That way, I could read the updates before EVERYONE ELSE!!! HAHAHAHAHA!

...but, seriously. Update soon :) :) :)

cant wait fer more

damn that was hot...love the story .write more soon

k you have to write more it sounds really good

Not bad for your first story. Here are some suggestions:

(1) Everytime someone new speaks, jump down a line and then type the response. For example, this is what you did...


Miroku and sango had been dating for 2 years and more often than not he had a hand print on his face." Hey gome what's up?" "Hey san, miroku, just koga and yasha going at i again." ''what about me?'' "hey yasha. Nothing so what's up?" Kagome asked. " well my HALF brother is back and he's coming to this school." " Really" Kagome asked.


What you should have done was this


Miroku and sango had been dating for 2 years and more often than not he had a hand print on his face." Hey Gome what's up?"

"Hey San, Miroku, just Koga and Yasha going at it again."

''What about me?''

"Hey Yasha. Nothing so what's up?" Kagome asked.

"Well my HALF brother is back and he's coming to this school."

"Really?" Kagome asked.

(Not all in italics, I was just using them to show what it should have looked like.)


(2) Check your story over. You didn't capitilize a lot of words in your story. If you are having trouble, I suggest you get a beta.

(3) Add more description to the scenes and add what the characters are thinking. Don't just use '....' but you can incorporate their thoughts into the story. For example.


Kagome looked upon the tall figure that was Sesshoumaru and her mind began to travel a mile a minute. Why was he here? Sure, he went to the same school as me before, but he left for a while. Where did he go and why is he back?

Kagome was jerked out of her muses when Sesshoumaru looked at her and smirked.


That's all I can think of for now. I will tell you more when I can think of some. If you add and change this story, it will become much better!

Good luck!

-Ashley

this story is sooo awesome!!! Its original and has such a remarkable kind of ‘spark’ to it!!

I loved how u ended the chapter!!! I wonder what else Sesshomaru will do? *wiggles eyebows* XD!

PWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ CONTINUE N THANK U!!! ^_^

P.S. lemons pweeeeeeeez

You did well for your first fanfic. ^_^ I am sure you'll be a pro 'bout time you finish it! Great job!

-River