Ok so I don't have a heart to rate this yet but please, don't take offense. Your storyline if a good one and I like where you're going with it so far but there are several things you need to bring it to it's fullest potential AND I do see potential. So first, I'm not an English Major but you seriously need a beta to help with the grammar, spelling and punctuation. Then if you could space the sentences alittle it would make it easier on the eyes to read. Other than that, I hope that you'll continue this as I am curious to know if Sesshoumaru is human or demon and why does he live where he does...is he not taiyoukai and Lord of the Western Lands and did Kagome's brother kill her family or did I misread that? Jen