kya!! rin's such a cutie! finally a story where she isn't so gaga over sess! little cutie punk, nice!

upload please!!!

starts off a little short, but i like a development of plots. nicely done so far.

haha I'm glad i found this update before it dissappeared!
rins a little punk in this story.
i love it!
:D

I like your story. However, if I may offer some constuctive critizism...you may want to find a beta reader. I noticed many places where you've either misused a word or used the wrong tense of the word. For example, "He had got to be gay." This should read "He has got to be gay."

Like I said before you have a good story idea but a good beta reader would benefit it greatly. Hope to see more!!

I like your story its really good! update soon pleasa!

heey there! this sure looks interesting. I wish you update more chapters soon; please, I'm very into this story.

-Kanz

Coolness!! This is a sweet idea for a fic. I really liked it!! Toddlers...with...ATTITUDE!!!!!

Yikes! The italics didn't actually show up though. ___>

Hey, and I forgot to tell you great job. I am enjoying the story and setting so far. Keep up the good work!

great job

Keep going ^_^

I had the same problem.

EX:

(word/sentence you want in italics)


Hope I helped! * ^_^ *

I love the fanfiction I hope you update soon. :)

I like it we need a change of the same ole' topics.... I like where this is going and want to know more update soon....

I do believe I would like to read more of this.

This is a great first chapter. Keep going! As for italics, its i > (minus the spaces) and / i > to end the code.
you need both the left and right sideways V thingies... I don't know if it'll show in this message...

i love the story, it's kind of like a fairy tale that i should know, of the 7 daughters where one is mistaken and also not part of the family!
Keep up the story, it sounds great!
i dunno about italic though..
Have a good weekend!