an extraordinarily moving piece. i gotta say that i thoroughly enjoyed every second of it. i love your writing style too, your use of words and how everything seemed to flow from one thing to the next in smooth progression...very beautiful. i'm glad i came across this and took the time to read it. very well done!
-hasu86
swasdiva- Mon 19 Nov 2007
| Everytime I read this fic, I feel like a servant girl stealing a glance between a door slightly ajar, peering upon an intimate moment as if I'm watching the poems read unfold in candlelight. It's surreal, how beautiful this story is. It's so softly written, like a gasp put to paper. I'm utterly transfixed. This is amazing work!
Suicide- Wed 17 Oct 2007
| Wow, the plot is moving so fluently. I just love how segmented yet smoothly these scenes change from one another. The thoughts that are expressed are so sad and those that are not expressed are so mysterious; full of intentions that we know not.
Tally Mark- Wed 17 Oct 2007
| Oh, this was beautiful. The imagery for their pain...the way Rin's name kept breaking him...it was just so sad and lovely. Deep. I can't wait to see more.
Suicide- Fri 05 Oct 2007
| You have no idea how moved I was by these fragmented scenes. I think the fragments accentuated the tone and brought how how sad and detached these characters are feeling. Wonderful beginning. Please continue.
karls- Fri 05 Oct 2007
| ? i don't really get what happened yet, but please continue.
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