Reviews for Why Did You Stay ? by onlyinmydreams_88
Sessygurl- Sat 07 Jun 2008
Excellent start!
reina- Sat 07 Jun 2008
Well I'm gonna be honest here, there are a lot of formatting problems with your story, and it could use a LOT more detail. The pace of the story is too rushed, you should slow it down and focus on things one by one.
That being said, the story has a lot of potential, and the dialogue is fairly in character. With some minor editing, this could be a wonderful read.
That being said, the story has a lot of potential, and the dialogue is fairly in character. With some minor editing, this could be a wonderful read.