I like it overall. Just as an FYI it's tongue not tong when Sess was thinking of eating Momo & licked his lips & gall not gull when she grabs his ear & those are just the 2 that I mentioned there are several more.
I'm enjoying this story very much, it has a good plot, lots of humor, and I like OC Sesshomaru. However, since you brought it up, your spellcheck still needs a little bit of work. Such as the line written before you mentioned this: "They all mounted their horses, and road out". It should be "rode" instead of "road" in this context. I've noticed this numerous times, but had decided to ignore it because I like the story so much. And, I really hope you don't take this little bit of constructive criticism the wrong way. I'm only mentioning it because you mentioned it first. Please, don't let this stop you from continuing this story. I'm really looking forward to finding out how this situation of Kagome and Sesshomaru's pans out. You're actually a pretty good author to be able to write a story where Sesshomaru flubs up so much. I like that. And, like I said, a few misspelled words hasn't stopped me from reading it. :D
jojo661538 (Chapter 14) - Sat 03 Jul 2010
i didnt know that about the monkeys but it makes scence anyways keep up the great work i hope to read more soon the part where they both roll down hill always makes me laugh ^_^
Awsome! i never ever would have seen that comming!!! time for me to be my fangirly self (squeal!) seshy is such a sweetheart!!
Diane (Chapter 14) - Sun 27 Jun 2010
Well I like it overall. Had a good laugh when they mounted their houses & rode off at the end, I was wondering what kinds of houses they rode, victorian, cape cod, etc. I doubt they'll get very far riding houses though.
STAY SAFE! and wow, thats.... Sess is gunna roast those elders. =x they must have a death wish... using Sesshomaru.. that's why he's hunting Naraku.
TEASE!
MORE!
*wiggles update bribery c0okie at you*
jojo661538 (Chapter 12) - Fri 08 Jan 2010
wow he must be super dirty i hear grass stains are a pain in the ass to clean keep up the great work ^_^
stars (Chapter 12) - Mon 04 Jan 2010
please updata
REDWOLF (Chapter 12) - Fri 01 Jan 2010
This was good!
Lexie (Chapter 9) - Thu 24 Dec 2009
lol. i bet kagome only tacked him so she could feel him up, i know i would ^_^
please update!
yEy i think your back to where you were. now i want to see more >:3 a pouncing kagome is a good kagome ^_^
fatcatmom (Chapter 2) - Wed 16 Dec 2009
Love the Willey Cayote moment that Kagome is having. Please update soon. Great work!
Ah, you live in Toronto, lucky you! I loved your little story of your Christmas shopping fiasco, you told it so wonderfully. So frustrating! And ironic. I really enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story. I'm tempted to cheat and seek it out on ff.net, it sounds like you have more chapters posted there. I will try to restrain myself, and wait for the next chapter to come out on Dokuga. It will really be hard to wait to find out what happens next! You are definitely a born story teller!
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