very good story, i loved it. it went so well with sesshomaru and kagome in it. keep up the good work
Sakura (Chapter 1) - Thu 12 Jun 2008
I enjoyed it. Kag and Sess always make a good story, all of your stories are good. Just a suggestion make this a short story. Just to tie up the loose ends. Anywa great job and keep it up.
I really enjoyed this story! I do hope there will be more soon! You did a great job! ^__^ -KB
This is beautiful hon.With minor tweaks here and there it could be divine.Pick up your tooshie and get a you know what.
You did quite well with this story, and there isn't really a lot you need to work on. I would also recommend a beta-reader. The only things that I really noticed were some grammatical errors, incorrect phrasing, and run-on sentences. Easily fixed. Great job, and I hope that you continue this storyline!
This is an awsome story!The lemon
scean was great!I really hope you write more!
I'm looking forward to the rest of this story! Other than the occasional spelling-type error, your story is very wonderfully done.
Netealia (Chapter 1) - Wed 11 Jun 2008
Wow.... This was really good I hope you plan to continue.
miranda (Chapter 1) - Tue 10 Jun 2008
I love this story. I also read your stories on fanfiction.net, you are officially my favorate author. I love Mulon. It the best disney movie ever! Anyway, I cant wate for the up-date,:)
I am a very big fan of your works. This story was a marvelous beginning. You didn't drag out the unnecessary and it got right to the point. As well, your sex scenes are lovely
himeno (Chapter 1) - Sat 07 Jun 2008
This is a awesome piece, i think your descriptions are great you gave real insight to what they both were feeling. great detail
As always, I really enjoy your writing! I feel you could definitely benefit from a beta reader, I know I have. There were a couple spelling and grammatical errors that I found, but that definitely didn't take away from the amazing job you did! Keep up the fantastic work; I look forward to reading more of your stories :)
Page 3 of 3
| | | | | | | | | | | |