interesting chapter. cant wait until the next one.
I really like this concept and its used so rarely in fic. I also like the idea of Kagome battling Sesshomaru to try and 'get out' of being his mate... after all, the female has to test the mettle of a male as well, correct? Most don't expand on the idea of Kagome using her smarts to try and win a battle, and I hope you use such a tool in your arsenal. I've yet to read a story where Kagome is the victor in a mating battle and also wins against Sesshomaru because of her smarts; only to lose the next year around. Just a thought (and it might take a while more) but wouldn't it be an interesting concept? Sesshomaru getting beaten by a human miko (the most powerful one alive, granted) only to come back the next year and beat her at her own game? Just a bit of brainstorming, in case you're interested. I'd think if Sesshomaru lost against Kagome he'd be dead-set on wanting her because she'd have done something no other had ever done before: Beating him. Plus, the challenge for him would be impossible to resist.
Now, on to the story grammar: I noticed it needs a bit of polish in some parts. For example, you mispelt 'trunk' with 'truck' when Kagome leaned against the trunk of a tree... little mistakes like that are scattered throughout and you might want to get a beta or read through it a few more times before posting if you're nitpicky. You might also want horizonal lines/breaks in between what's happening with Kagome and her tachi, just to make it flow a bit better and show a clear seperation/pause.
Other than that, I'm really enjoying this story and am curious to see what's in store for Kagome and Sesshomaru in this mating battle.
Emma (Chapter 2) - Sun 30 Sep 2012
love <3
really like the two chapters. can't wait until the next one.
Keep it coming.
jojo661538 (Chapter 1) - Fri 21 Sep 2012
is she the last one left? is she going to fight sesshoumaru?keep up the great work i hope to read more soon ^_^
i'm grinning at this. NEXT chappie pls!!
Koi (Chapter 1) - Thu 20 Sep 2012
This is starting out to be veryinteresting. I can't wait until you put up the next chapter to see what sesshomaru does!
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming.
Maryssa (Chapter 1) - Thu 20 Sep 2012
wow this is very intersting cant wait to see wat happens next
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