Poor Sia, all brainwashed... complete FUBAR and I love it! You're talent in the drama and intrigue makes this such a great read!

This is getting goood. I can't wait until we get back with Sesshomaru and Kagome, I am strating to miss them...hopefully that barrier drops soon. KAGOME is his perfect mate. Lol about Inuyasha and the group getting there and talking to Sai. That is pretty interesting. I wonder what Sai will use them for. I also love her revenge on Isamu. She kinda had it coming. I mean she was a bitch for tricking Sai and getting her mate involved in something that could have be avoided. Kill the mate then kill Isamu slowly. PERFECT! :evil laugh: what puzzles me is the fact that she kinda sounds like she regret it...they killed you first Sai. A life for a life right? Okay one life for two lives...but still they started it. (Lol)

Hi,

Your fic is really good and I love it dearly! I would be more than glad to be your beta! 

Let me know!

dri_moutinho @ yahoo . com . br

What a trickster Sai is!  Inuyasha is right to be cautious.  And Kags has no idea that she is now being stalked, basically, by a psycho crazy demoness.  

You might want to change "Netherlands" to "Netherworld" or just "Nether", considering that the Netherlands is a real place and a far cry from the afterlife.

You've got a few grammar and pacing issues, on top of some misused tenses, but there's a good base here. Keep it up.

THERE WERE SOME GRAMMAR ERRORS AND A COMPLETE TENSE JUMP AT THE END (PAST TENSE TO PRESENT TENSE) TO GO WITH THE FEW SPECKLES THROUGHOUT, BUT IT WAS AN INTERESTING ENOUGH CHAPTER TO OVERLOOK IT ALL.  I THINK YOU HAVE AN INTERESTING START SO FAR. OH, AND THE CAPS LOCK IS A SIDE EFFECT OF DOING THIS ON MY PHONE INSTEAD OF MY COMPUTER BECAUSE I'M TOO LAZY TO LOG IN. I APOLOGIZE FOR THAT.

-KD

the story just keeps getting better and better. love the last chapter and how you showed the sesshoumaru cares for rin as a daughter. Nice to know more about sia. i wondered if one the two remaining demons is isamu. 

Keep it coming.

I feel bad for Sai. I can't wait to read more. I wonder what Sesshoumaru has planed for Kagome.

Yeah being betrayed by someone you love is the most heart wrenching thing ever. I was curious as to why Sai wanted revenge so much and received Naraku's powers in the end. I just really hate that Ismau manipulated Sai's feelings like that. All Isamu had to do was tell her that she was not interested and end it with that. It's ashame that there are people like that out there, they love the attention that they are receiving and choose to lead that "interested in becoming more than friends" person on. (Smh) I also wonder what Naraku has instore for Sai when he finds out... I mean Sai has a crush on Kagome. That's going to lead to trouble and DRAMA! I can't wait until the next chapter update! It's like how Naraku was with Kikyo!!!

great chapter!  can't wait for the next one. i love how sessh and kagome are with each other.  it's antagonistic and yet not. 

two grammar things i noticed.  there = place i.e. Please go over there.; their = possessive plural i.e. Their basketball is under the table.; they're = they are

the second grammar i noticed is than.  than = comparative i.e. She has more apples than i do.; then = sequential  i.e. go there then go here.

She is going to Sesshomaru's place...ooooh he is already nuzzling her and caressing her face.... I cant wait until the next update. And please don't apologize about updating so sooon! That is soo good that you have time to do thaT, not a lot of good authors do that. You being able to make to that is so great. And now your officially my FAVORITE author. Lol

Thank you so much for considering your fans! I hope though that you keep to the story how you originally planned it. I mean yeah i bet some people will have some great ideas, but they can always make their own story. No offense. Your story is perfect with you sticking to the way you want it. Can't wait until the next update!

And i obviously need to take my own advice ;p 

Sorry bout all the poor typing there

Loving the story sofar but you might need to r-read teh chapters  an extar time before posting (or have a beta)

There was some mixups betwen then and than.

Then = time/sequence "first i did this then i did that"

Than = comparative "This is harder than it looks"

Hey! I owe you four reviews! Good work, it's a cool story! keep up the writing! :)

Hello, I really love this story I just read it last night and it was fantastic.  I hope you update soon because I can't wait to read more.  You have the characters very much like the real ones and I like that.  Hard to believe this your first story its that good.  Take care!

As much as I like letting the writers write their own work, I couldn't help but take you up on your offer in regards to why Kagome was called to Sesshoumaru's 'game'.  I don't know what you have planned already, but this idea really intrigues me. As I'm totally against the idea of Kagome being anything other than a special human miko (though, to be honest, I would most likely still read if you went that course), I've really had to wrack my brain for something not only unique, but convincing.  And I have thought a lot about it (if you care to read a decent amount of word vomit, just let me know :p ) but essentially I've come up with this:  Kagome could have been receptive to the call because of a combination of her connection to the Shikon (the waring demon and miko energies) and her constant companionship to demons.  OR it could be that youki and ki are just two sides of a whole energy (yin and yang), and that because she is so powerful, she can also be called by it. oH! That could also mean she could manipulate it as well...intriging idea....    But its nothing conclusive and just speculation.  As for why she was called, in essense she is the perfect choice or any male in that she is powerful, compassionate, intelligent, and a spitfire.   But other than the obvious I got nothing.  BAnd as for her not noticing the barrier...in her urgency to answer the call her mind just imitted that fact. :p

Keep it coming.

Omg this is getting goood. I can't believe Sai is Naraku's ward. And she loves Kagome. I love the turn of events. I wonder what Sesshomaru has to say about this!!  Gosh this is good. Keep up the good work! Can't wait for the next chapter!!