Keep it coming.
Omg Great story,love the dark Kagome. I mean LOVE IT. But why does she have to tell him sooon, or why does he butt in soon? Why did she let him into his sercets so soon? Are you plan on making this a short story? Idk it just seems like the story doesnt have enough to simmer. Its good and I love the story idea but i think its moving to fast. I dont feel like she would have so "willing" given him answers the way she did or her friend. I guess I thought this would go differently then most other stories like this. I miss the drama and little bit of waiting and fighting between the two. Alot people story seem to be lacking that alot and just getting staright to them becoming close. I thought you story would have the simmer factor but yeah as i said i do love dark kagome and the its a goood story. Thanks for writting and keep it up. I look forward to more of your work and the rest of the story.
i really enjoy this and it is very different. However i would caution you to be sure you look at your sentences after you finish dialogue like "she said tiredly" or whatever like that i noticed some errors mostly just stuff a beta could catch for you. But i loved it and hope to see more soon :)
=Mistress=
Keep it coming.
mari (Chapter 7) - Sat 04 May 2013
thanks for the update loved it.
Very nice chapter, please update soon....I will be waiting! =]
mari (Chapter 6) - Fri 03 May 2013
LOVED it thanks.
Keep it coming.
mari (Chapter 5) - Fri 03 May 2013
love this story.
Great story, keep it coming.
Midian (Chapter 2) - Thu 02 May 2013
I think the origonal knight rider can only be a Trans am
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