Yaassss! Kagome yaaassss!!! Let him have it! The truth will set you free! Even if by means of shocking your captor. Lol
OMG so I love your writing SO MUCH! But I do feel the need to give one bit of constructive criticism. You're writing is so poetic and beautiful! But sometimes it's so much so that I have a hard time following your meaning or visualizing what you're describing. I like to take my time to visualize what the writer is seeing when they describe such a scene. On occasion I've had difficulties with this in your story. An example would be...
"Falling to the ground, her eyes wide and blank with shock, the distant scream of her mother echoed through her mind, pulling at her heart. However, despite the proximity of its source, the cry of concern was flat as if muffled by long distance. For though her mother’s arms were already lacing about her fallen figure, Kagome's awareness was away from this location, and beside her seething Mate."
I'm confused. It's she beside her mother whose arms are "lacing about her taken figure?" Or is she beside her seeing mate? It's kind of hard to follow, to picture this epic moment playing out. The "distant scream" would instate her mother was far away, however her mother's arms "lacing about her" would indicate otherwise? Just for clarification, it would be nice to understand your meaning here better.
Carlyn (Chapter 15) - Mon 10 May 2021
Well... she had to have seen this coming, right? Lol
Carlyn (Chapter 14) - Mon 10 May 2021
Dun dun DUUUUUNNNN!!! Oh Sesshomaru, your timing is impeccable as always.
Carlyn (Chapter 8) - Mon 10 May 2021
Just wow. I love this take on the mark being a means of controlling the female.
Carlyn (Chapter 7) - Mon 10 May 2021
Jeez. That sounds scary
Carlyn (Chapter 6) - Sun 09 May 2021
OMG I love it. I LOVE her determination.
Carlyn (Chapter 4) - Sat 08 May 2021
Whaaaaaat? Sesshomaru you DICK! LOL
Carlyn (Chapter 2) - Sat 08 May 2021
Wow. How is this the first I've heard of you? This story is amazing! That was a bad ass Lemon too btw. Just awesome writing!
Carlyn (Chapter 1) - Sat 08 May 2021
Very well written! And oh damn. That's quite an introduction to the story!
Mary (Chapter 1) - Mon 09 Nov 2020
Alright so I binge read this in 24h and please, please tell me you have not abandoned this, because it would be a real shame if you did. It is so good. There is not a lot of stories with a dominiering Sesshoumaru out there, which seems strange since he is not only a very powerful demon but also a feudal war lord. As such he would have been raised to see himself as superior and to demand the obediance of those around him. And even in canon, lets be real, he is a bastard. A bastard whom we love, but still, dudes a prick.
Props to Grandpa for trying to take on a daiyoukai. I mean it will probably fail, but credit where credit is due, the guy has got some balls.
April (Chapter 20) - Tue 21 Apr 2020
I really love this story and will also read your other stories. I really hope to read the rest of this one when you complete it. It is really good and you are a really talented author.
Lauren (Chapter 20) - Thu 15 Aug 2019
I really hope you come back to this story. I love it!
I hope you pick this back up you stopped right when their relationship was starting to turn
Still love it! x
Great so far, I look forward to reading more in the future.
Gaaaaah!!! How you could you stop there?!?! I need more!!!
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