Absolutely great story so far. Can't wait to read more soon. Great job!
First off, I like the premise of this story. It's not cliche. I haven't come across too many stories in which Sesshoumaru is forced to be trapped in InuYasha's body. The only thing that I can think of off the top of my head is a one-shot 'Better At Being You Than You' by SunsetMiko (one of my favs! - http://www.dokuga.com/fanfiction/story/746/1) - although Sesshoumaru isn't really "forced".
So far, your story is coming along well and continues to be intriguing. Just please don't rush it or Sesshoumaru gaining a heart may seem unbelievable *begs, begs, bats lashes*. All in all, however, I really like your story.
My only recommendation would be a seasoned beta. I think your story is very good, but with a good beta in your corner, it could be great! There are numerous grammatical errors and punctionation ommissions that, at times, causes confusion. Also, there are minor instances in which the story goes off on a slight tangent and messes with the "flow". But please do not take this as a negative estimation of your work so far! As I have mentioned above, I truly do like your story; I think that it is a good one and would really like to see you take it to completion! Writing fanfition takes a certain patience and dedication that I, myself, cannot practice, so I honestly admire the authors here who take the time out of their busy lives to fuel our fandom.
Nice, keep it coming.
Zalika (Chapter 17) - Sun 25 Aug 2013
The Kikyo memory came up...I'm curious to see how Sesshomaru handles that. The slow development between him and Kagome is slow, but I understand it. Waiting for the next update.
oooh so now sesshoumaru is able to see everything through inuyasha's eyes.....you'll probably add how sesshoumaru treated him as a child no?
Ok I have a one word review. ...... awesome
Keep it coming.
Come it, keep it coming.
Ha ha ha. If he could just stop being ice-prick for two seconds. So close and yet so far. She is so close to the truth and he was so close to tessiaga's secret. Kinda want Inuyasha in Sesshomaru's body to show up, just for laughs. But i gotta say, if Granny-inu is gonna keep him underwraps, she coulda worked it so he could get to know his father and family since he has missed out on it for so long. I love this story.
I dont know who to pity more. sesshy or kagome. haha both are so heart broken
just a small typo error in paragraph 3 (e-->be)
other than that thanks for the update
huhu. looks like a big update.
interesting so far!
Both chapters are awesome, keep it coming.
Kaitlyn (Chapter 15) - Fri 23 Aug 2013
This is an interedting series and you are doing a good job of keeping Sesshomaru in character, but take more care when revising your work.
Ai (Chapter 13) - Fri 23 Aug 2013
awesome chapter! I think Sesshomaru's ice cold shell is slowly cracking or melting whatever floats ur boat ;)
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