Uh, well...the first chapter had enough grammatical errors but the second was just unreadable. It looks like your beta used a text program and somehow the quotes and apostrophe symbols were messed up pretty bad. Too bad too because I really wanted to know what happened after the hot springs...

i luv it update soon please

I love it but aaaa what is with all the um yea white boxes?

OMG so lacivious. Love it. you simply must update...Man I say that a lot huh oh well it true.

This story sounds so awesome! Update soon! Peace.

you better update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

um... some white blotches going on, might want to take another look at it.