love the little scene between them, and more of an insight to the Thief's thoughts *^_^*
and I'm wondering just how bad Miroku will be... o.0 or maybe someone will get him in order?
I love your attention to details! I absolutely savored the destription of the school, and the Dr's office. Those little descriptive measures really help to bring a story to life. Oh and total giggles when Kagome checked out Miroku! "Way to go, Sango" ...I agree. lol ugh and the gum scene!!!! ROFL I laugh now just thinking about it! My gosh... a pouty Sesshomaru/Naraku how CUTE and so totally out of character in a completely charming and believable way!
Also, the further explanation Nah Rah Ku gave about his sharing of the professors mind, was insightful in helping explain exactly how they have merged and where one ends and begins. That clarity was very helpful. You didn't spend too much time on it, a brief explanation was all it needed, and it fit perfectly with the story.
And sooo smokin'! The offering scene, as every single one before absolutely took my breath away. I was literally chewing my nails. At times I can actualyl see Naraku in the scenes, and others I'm able to see the Inu Sesshomaru. Its amazing how you've worked that. I dont know if you have managed to pull that off intentionally, or if its happenstance, but my goodness, it SO works for this story. Its amazing.
Your limes really build up the suspence for the lemon which I assume is enevitable at some point. It gives the reader a "fix" without ruining the anticipation. And as always, it was so beautifully crafted and tastefully done. Once again the dialogue and internal monologue really added to the depth of the scenes.
I also really appreciated the clarity and attention you gave to body possitioning during "action" scenes.... particularly the lime. In a forum post I made about help from lemon authors, Sugar0o had brought up how important proper and CLEAR body possitioning details are to her... I didn't realize just how important it was to me TOO until I read this. Reading a good lime/lemon or just love scene in general really puts into perspective how I want to go about it myself as an author. Reading your story has helped me already in so many ways.
Oh my gosh. I really love this story, and the more I get to know YOU I find myself more and more in admiration of both story and author. Thanks for the update, and I am as always in high anticipation of the next! <3
Zyren (Chapter 12) - Sat 06 Nov 2010
i love love love this story. when Kagome got possessed by Lyka I wondered if she would have to fight Lyka to keep from jumping Sesshoumaru/Na Ra Ku's bones but its interesting that she seems to fear him and it makes me wonder why, considering the legend said she loved him. but i do quite enjoy the tension between Kagome and Na Ra Ku. I certainly hope Miroku wont do something terrible. your characters are extremely accurate so i dont think he would do more that ask that she take on more of Sango's work so that he could see his girl more, at least thats what im hoping.
but anyway i look forward to the next chapter. Happy Writing!!!
Zyren
Inkasha Taisho (Chapter 12) - Sat 06 Nov 2010
I'm just being a lazy ho-ho and not logging in. I just caught on the chapters -eeep...I was out of town and away from all the wonderfulness of your writing, toture!!- These are getting a lot more intense, especially with Taisho getting more possessive. I think love this everytie you post. These are so amazing!!
Wait a second! Miroku asked Kagome that at the end of this chapter?! What a douchebag!
>:I
Amazing chapter, nonetheless. Gah! Poor Kagome, caught in between.
Keep up the beautiful work.
<3
Chii (Chapter 1) - Sat 06 Nov 2010
Phenomenal!
This is so captivating, I just want to keep reading.
I can't wait for the next update! But, you always update rather quickly. Thank you so much for doing so :)
Wow, SUSPENSE! I imagine what Miroku's offering is in order to keep it a secret.
:) Maan, you already have me wishing for the next chapter.
I'm spellbound!
I'm sure by now you know that this is the most original fiction, I've read, it's absolutely amazing! I wonder where you got your inspiration and idea.
I really like how you chose to set your story somewhere else besides the U.S. or Japan! I'm super drawn into it and it's currently one of my favorites! Keep going!
Gah!!! Its taken me like a week to review :( I'm soooo sorry. Hopefully its better late than never. I thought this was a pivitol chapter, letting us get a glimpse of the evolving situation and relationships between characters. I really think you are doing a great and believable job with Kagome's own possession. Its nice to see a throwback to her "spiritual powers" from the manga, without playing to that too strongly and keeping it original. It makes it familure but keeps it suspenseful! Also enjoyed the little exchange between Kagome, the professor, and Bruckner - awesome tension and confusion. I'm so in love with this... I'm going to go back and reread it from the begining, just for the heck of it... and because I'm mildly obsessed.
hm, I wonder if this 'Lyka' is deluded into thinking good sex = love... if so, whenever she gets the chance to speak w/ Naraku she's going to be very disappointed... serves her right, bitch. LOL! X3
Lol. Aces for Kagome's dirty thoughts! Looking forward to your next update~
Amora (Chapter 10) - Mon 25 Oct 2010
Totally awesome in spooky enough for Halloween. Keep up the great writing
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