This story makes no sense. Sesshomaru raped her for two days and she wakes up happpy? No one is happy about rape. Not to mention, she begged not to be raped and impregnated before he forces her. Now after two days of being raped, she's now ecstatic to be pulled by her rapist? That's illogical.
A lot of parts in this story are missing. In each chapter, there are missing scenes. It just jumps from one scene to another. It makes this story very difficult to enjoy reading beside the other problems. Do you write half the chapters then come back weeks later and finish it? Because it really seems like it.
So kagome is pregnant now and so happy with her current situation that all her plans for escape are out of the window...? Nonsense. This sounds like a choppy, bad remake of "The Breeder" by TEXANLADY. I'm done reading this after chapter 10(9). I would have thought that there would be more detail about any characters or just in the fanfic itself but your story falls short there as well. I've read some of your reviews and they are complaining about the same problems. Yet, you haven't fixed any of them. It's unfortunate because the summary was so promising but didn't reflect in the fanfic. I really hope you revise your story with some original thoughts and put better effort into it.
Fuyuki (Chapter 30) - Mon 05 Jan 2015
cant wait for the next update!
I hope you will ad more to it
Emmy (Chapter 1) - Fri 07 Feb 2014
Please write more! I really love your story and I can't wait to see how this story progress.
Please for the love of all that is holy, get the next chapter out as soon as you can... I can't stand the suspense. This story is absolutely fantastic!
Ana (Chapter 30) - Tue 07 Jan 2014
Please update... :)
Don´t give up on yhis story!!! <3
Ceelie (Chapter 30) - Wed 27 Nov 2013
Ugh I love that you made such a strong willed Kagome, but it's killing me too!
Keep going I'm rooting for you!
This story is so good! There are no errors! It's fantastic! Oh yeah, when's the next chapter!
This story is so good! There are no errors! It's fantastic!
rose (Chapter 30) - Sat 23 Nov 2013
next chapter please
sick and if kagome likes after this :..... rape is never ok. escape or death you never submit to a rappist
The fic so far seems a bit rushed... I'm a bit disappointed it's so similar to 'The Breeder' by Texanlady. When I read the part where she gives birth to a live pup, that was something unique to 'The Breeder' I had never seen anywhere else, so to see it bothered me a little to be honest...
Eliona (Chapter 29) - Sun 22 Sep 2013
Oh! no pressure Kagome >_> three weeks, lol. Keep up the good work =)
POST PLEASE !!!
Szira (Chapter 1) - Sun 22 Sep 2013
Gotta say I'm pretty disappointed. I'm a huge fan of dark stories. HUGE. So when I saw your summary I was like cool this one might be Good. Started reading, like others have said it moves way too fast and contains multiple spelling errors. I was willing to overlook that till i started to get a little bored. I skimmed through the rest of the story and realized why I was feeling bored.
Your story felt like a watered down version of Texanlady's The Breeder. So I found her story. It was posted first. I looked at the site your book was posted. As far as I could tell her story was still posted first.
Great chapter, keep it coming.
I love your story^^ youre right this is your story and there's nothing wrong with sesshy here^^ thanks!
Shaneka (Chapter 29) - Fri 20 Sep 2013
Great chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.
rose (Chapter 29) - Fri 20 Sep 2013
next chapter please
mari (Chapter 29) - Fri 20 Sep 2013
this story is great thanks.
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