Ok, please do not take this as a flame! It is the opposite actually.
I think you spent too much time talking about what everyone received! Too many presents, for too many people! That explanation should have half of what you wrought!
Apart from that, I loved it ^^
What is Satori’s idea? This can’t be good!
Thank you for the update! <3
rose (Chapter 13) - Thu 03 Apr 2014
next chapter please
Loved this story. Hope you decide tto continue with it. Kagome being an astrophysicist and a genius is a new and interesting idea. And I love Q, though I have a weakness for cute fluffy recue dogs...
Best thoughts and Thank You!
Ana (Chapter 13) - Thu 03 Apr 2014
A lovely chapter :D
Thank you for the update! <3
Like it, keep it coming.
mari (Chapter 13) - Wed 02 Apr 2014
LOVED it thanks.
mari (Chapter 12) - Tue 01 Apr 2014
i loved the update it was very adorable thanks.
rose (Chapter 12) - Tue 01 Apr 2014
next chapter please
This chapter is so stupid and dumb, April Fools!
I really enjoy reading this story. I love your portrayal of Kagome:)
Halloween is a fabulous holiday! Dressing up is always fun, you can be whatever you want.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Cool chapter, keep it coming.
Ana (Chapter 11) - Mon 31 Mar 2014
Uper flufy chapter! :3
Nice work! :D
Thanks for the update! <3
Ket (Chapter 10) - Mon 31 Mar 2014
I'm a big fan of reading fanfictions... I usually don't have a problem with showing Sesshoumaru's different sides, but somehow this story just doesn't hit it for me. Don't get me wrong. I admire how you write the story and that you write a story at all, I believe you have great potential in you. It's just a tad bit weird for me to see Sesshoumaru let his brother hit him or Sesshoumaru be so acceptive of the scorn and all the things happening to him... Its just plain weird him being so submissive... Or him not remembering Rin... All in all I believe Sesshoumaru is way oc for me in this story, but that's just me being weird. Anyway, keep up the good work!
rose (Chapter 11) - Mon 31 Mar 2014
next chapter please
Nicole (Chapter 11) - Mon 31 Mar 2014
This chapter made for wonderful wake-up reading :)
Filler or not, these types of chapters make the whole story more real because by the time Sesshomaru and Kagome are talking love, we'll know it'll be the real I-know-you go-the-distance deal.
Kiyo (Chapter 10) - Sun 30 Mar 2014
I can appreciate what you're writing but I have just one criticism.
You spend too much time describing the action rather than showing us. The conversations that characters have, for example. Rather than just giving a brief summary of what happened, actually write it out. Sesshoumaru taking Rin and Shippou out to get painting supplies would have been a lovely scene to help reinforce how Sesshourmaru is changing as a person from a selfish playboy brat into a more humble individual. For time skips, sure it makes more sense to just use a paragraph rather than doing a blow by blow reaccount of them doing potentially the same things over and over.
You're doing well, I just see the potential to become greater.
Nice chapter, keep it coming.
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