Well one big hurdle overcome. I wonder what else will make itself known. I do like that they are becoming closer yet still have their moments of awkwardness. I can't wait to see what happens next and what becomes of Kagome's dreams :)
I've never written a review, so I'll start with praises.
First off, your story is brilliant. Well thought-out, and extremely well executed. I love seeing the characters portrayed through your writing. I also enjoy how you take your time with the plot, letting it evolve and move slowly, never rushing through anything. Simply excellent.
The one thing that bothered me is what urged me to actually comment. At first, I thought it was just an insert via Microsoft Word so that you wouldn't have to type out "Kagome" constantly, but soon realized that this was not the case. And so, my detailed (and hopefully inoffensive) criticism.
I can't help but cringe every time one of your OCs calls Kagome..."Cat." I understand the nickname, it makes sense, and in the context of your story, it fits.
The problem arises when she is referred to as Cat by someone and she is not only absent from the conversation, but also from the room.
It became overwhelmingly awkward during the argument between Shinzuru and Yuugao, for example.
The nickname I gave my younger brother is "Chubbs" on account of his adorable cheeks, however if I were defending him in a confrontation with another adult, there is no way I would refer to him as Chubbs, especially if he wasn't present. It would be insulting because 1.) It is a personal nickname not chosen by him, and 2.) as I am not attempting to undermine him, it would be childish to use any name but his own.
In short, please stop having characters refer to Kagome as Cat. Other than that, rock on. I'm favoriting this story.
Keep it coming.
So glad you updated, lol. Hadn't even realized how long it'd been since I last read something from you. ^_^ Per usual, I love your writing. Also, congrats on the win in the Best Drama category. I wouldn't have voted for myself even if I could. I've always enjoyed this fic and I have to admit I'm a little disapointed you didn't get 1st. Still, a win is a win. ^_^ So congrats. I look forward to the next installment.
Woah woah, wait--TWO updates a week?? Oh my, I think I just died. You spoil me, I swear. It's so good to be reading this story again and I absolutely cannot wait for more! Thanks for writing!
Dances like crazy around the room!!! My favorite story along with one of my favorite authors back again!! I loved the chapter Sesshoumaru finding Kagome and truly believing in her was fabulous!! But that one paragraph,
"The very idea of her giving up the pack they had built in the last year, the children and the family that he had never asked for, had never considered having, hurt something in his chest. That she would give up him caused a stab of pain."
That really struck a cord with in the heart. I think they are both coming to realize that they love one another. The kind of love that is binding not fleeting! Thank you for the wonderful update I'm so glad that your computer is up and running again I missed you greatly!!
Kayelyn (Chapter 31) - Thu 31 May 2012
SQWEEEE! Obviously I am happy that Hunter is working again. >.>
I really like how the ending of the Shikon No Tama paralled to the anime. And near feral Sess's "You will not keep me from her!" dang near made me swoon. This scene also reinforced, to me, how much they have come to rely on each other and believe in one another. It was unwavering in Kagome and in the end Sesshomaru as well. I believe he was allowed his tiny smidgen of doubt because there are many women who would jump at the chance to erase their rape and the fallout from it.
The return was sweet and such an uplifting way to end the chapter. That moment between Yuugao and Sesshomaru and Shippo and Kagome was touching. Now it's onward to the next part of their lives, and I am sooo excited for it.
Amazing as always, Hat love! See you Tuesday!!
Memori (Chapter 31) - Thu 31 May 2012
YAY! I was SUPER excited when I saw that RUTH had been updated! Great chapter and I can't wait until tomorrow and next Tuesday! You have made my day! Thanks for being such a great writer and I'm sorry to hear about you computer but am very happy that everything is A-OKAY! =D
Welcome back! Great chapter!!! I love it.
Suka25 (Chapter 30) - Thu 10 May 2012
whats going to happen next??????
Kylie (Chapter 25) - Wed 02 May 2012
I love this story SSSOOO much that I just sit around waiting for wednesday!
I come home from work, don't even get changed and jump on the computer to check if its been updated.
Like now, I'm sitting waiting for the wednesday update as its 4:58pm in the afternoon on a cloudy/rainy Australian wednesday!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
All is great, keep it coming.
Kayelyn (Chapter 30) - Thu 26 Apr 2012
O.O
Ok, I was soooo not expecting that! My heart is literally pounding right now. Oh my god!!!!!!
Gah this chapter was so full of win, and I can honestly say that there wasn't one thing I did not like. Heart-stopping and beuatifully written! It is going to be so hard to wait until next Wednesday...but I will do my best.
*bounces*
O.M.G. You've just completely blown me away with this! You are amazingly talented! I can honestly say I've never seen this new plot twist you've thrown in and I can't wait to see where you're going with it!!
OMG!!! OMG!!!! Please, Please tell me sesshoumaru finds her!! The beginning of this chapter was so tough to read I couldn't bare it if she had to go through that again! Your writing leaves me on the edge of my seat juat praying for more. Watching the emotion from Sesshoumaru and his beast come alive was amazing. There is no denying that he truly cares for Kagome even more than he himself or anyone else was aware of! OMG!! Next Wednesday can't come soon enough!!!
AAAAAAAAAAARGH! I have to wait a WEEK for the next piece!!!! DX<
oi.......gonna spontaneously combust from anicipation.....-_-
Ah, love it. Such an unexpected twist and it will be hard for Sesshoumaru to deny his feelings now. Looking foward to next week!
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